Slick Pavement

It's my birthday today (05_20_99) I'm not high in spirits, so I wrote this poem.

Slick pavement

Rigged with the intricate design of an infinite soul

My soul

Splattered with the spilling of a recent sacrifice

My sacrifice

The webs and cracks code my memories

All the ones I wish I could hide

But I cannot

Still,

Spaces will one day become more cracks

This,

I cannot deny

But,

Will the concrete loosen more?

Or become new again?

With the arrival

Of someone

Who really cared?

I can see a flower

Sprouting from within the cracks

It's growth is slow paced

Will it one day bloom for me?

Become my little prize in life?

Or will it wilt

And blow away with the wind

Like every thing else in my life?

I wonder...

Reviews

[popourii]

I'm sorry you're feeling down on your birthday :C For what it's worth you wrote your poem beautifully in my opinion despite it's sad subject. You added a nice photo too :)

I hope you have a wonderful birthday! Doubt is just a bunch of noise coming from downstairs.

[Graveyardfuck]

Thank you

[Poe Redd]

This is so beautiful! Deep and personal. Sad hopefull questions. I like it.

[Rahul]

It's very painful but well described about the tittle, the flower pic.'s good as well. It's a poem about "Hope's hopeless or hopeless's hope".
Great work by you !

[Simon Welsh]

As long as there's life, it will be beautiful. I like.

[K.S.78]

This to me is a poem about hope. I love your contrast between something hard and soft, like architecture and nature. I also liked that the lines went from long to short (I like to write like that too lol ;)) Anyways another great piece of work! :)

[Mr Dunne Poetry]

Earth day is a day to celebrate, not a day to be down. Great poem

[Account Closed]

I like the way you write. Its well put and very different every time you put out a new piece. Good job. :)

[Roxii]

I am sorry that you aren't happy on "Your Day." My best friend forgot my birthday so I know what feeling down on your birthday is all about...except I don't know why you are down so I can't really say much. lol

Have the most wonderful day my friend and fellow brilliant writer. :D

[chaotic katie]

sorry you're so down on your birthday i hope you feel better. writing does help i know from experience. Nicely penned piece by the way.

[The Girl That Let You G..]

*sigh* I am sorry you are down on such a special day as today :/
Love how your poem was quirky, and so expressive. It flows beautifully. Well done
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