Paper Wrists

A poem I wrote in class.

It cowers in the corner, shivering.

Her skin is paper white.

And she cannot see, for she has no eyes.

She draws on the walls...with her own blood.

Her bones stick out, she's very small, and frail.

She wants to kill herself...but they won't let her.

They constantly deprive her of food and water.

And when she refuses to eat, they force it down her throat.

She weeps, her cries unbearable to human ears.

She suffers...

She

is

me

... 

Reviews

[Kenneth Stephen Goodpas..]

You start off describing her as it then you switch to she and her. I think if you continued describing her as an it, that "it" would really add to the mood of the poem. The last three words distract me from the poem. It makes the meaning too apparent I think. Nonetheless, this is very poetic, beautiful yet dark.

[Rahul]

Quite different and confusing but if you think it's beautiful then it;s beautiful.

[Ethale Captor]

Chilling yet beautiful. Excellent job.

[Billy Sullivant]

I loved the mood of the poem. Awesome job.

[minnie:)]

A little confused here,
I'm just wondering, is this really a poem of your thoughts or is it just fun?
You don't have to say if you don't want to, it's just I want to know what point of view this poem is at.
~Minnie

[Graveyardfuck]

It's partially true.

[minnie:)]

Oh, what made you feel like this??

[Graveyardfuck]

Society

[minnie:)]

??

[Graveyardfuck]

Society is evil. Only accepting the stick thin girls. The beautiful, the fake. I haven't been accepted into society. So this is what it has come to. Starvation is my plight.

[minnie:)]

Oh! I really do know how you feel. It's like a law, you're not accepted unless you splatter yourself in makeup and plastic. It's hard for me to be accepted in anything. People always shew me away because of my looks, the way I dress, etc.
It's pathetic if you ask me. Society is pathetic.

[Graveyardfuck]

This is true.

[minnie:)]

It'd be nice if life wasn't like that.

[Roxii]

This is beautiful and horrorfying at the same time...It's amazing and just the way I like it. >:)

[Simon Welsh]

Beautiful but disturbing hon. That image doesn't help :/

[quinfinn]

the depth and honesty of this is superb but unsettling. well penned!

[pandorascollar]

Sad yet amazing poem I love it