She

The letter to you, to warn you about the killer.

Chapter 1: She

As I write this to you I want you to understand this and this only; Watch out, she will get you, she is cunning and smart and she will, without a doubt,  get you. Never look twice, if you think it was her keep going; if you look twice she will know.

Her name is Scarlet. No last name known, she is stunning: chilling red hair, soft skin with freckles like stars of a galaxy from cheek to cheek, always wearing black. Her eyes are the most unforgettable thing; they are a shimmering yellow, similar to a cat. No mistaking them for anyone else. Now to answer “What does she do?” She hunts, but of course, like any girl in a skinny black dress, she isn’t hunting deer or dove. She’s hunting you and me. She’s a trained assassin.  That’s why I say “Don’t look twice.” because unlike other assassins she’s not paid to kill, she does it just for pure means of amusement or for her father's amusement, and she’s getting sick of working for him. There is a system, lucky for me I figured it out before my last day. I rush to write this in fear of my time running out, hopefully I can win her over before her father does.  

Author's Note

read next chapter for the story to really unfold, notes would be helpful.

Reviews

[Chris]

Great beginning for a novel! It has the right hook to compel the reader to go to the next chapter, and it has enough detail to get the job done.

Breaking the fourth wall is pretty effective here. Be careful, though, about trying to anticipate reader reactions and thoughts. If a reader doesn't have that thought or reaction, it can be a hiccup for them. Maybe remove the questions at the beginning of the second paragraph and start with "Her name is Scarlet." It can have more oomph that way. :)

All in all, I think this is a good chapter for a writer who is just starting.

[Dreaming Summer]

Thank you so much! I will gladly take your advise. :)