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 When Caroline was seventeen, she ran away with her boyfriend Jeremy knowing they were soul mates. Once they ran away they didn't know where to go. They needed money, Jeremy looked around the small town and saw nothing that would bring in enough money for them both. Before they knew it they were across state borders into Colorado. New State, New Life.. hopefully. 

Two years later Caroline and Jeremy have a house in Colorado. Both seem to manage except each day they fight more & more. At first the fights weren't bad but now their starting to get physical. Caroline still loves Jeremy and doesn't want to lose him so she tries her best to stop fighting. For Jeremy things are different, he hates his job, his house, his life & wants to get away from the pain of the past, but he still loves Caroline too. So they both agreed to take a vacation to a nice hotel up north. Both of them were excited to spend time away from the house to actually have a chance to spend quality time with each other. They packed the car and drove away thinking they would be going to a nice hotel, but they weren't going to a hotel, they were going into the mountains were they would find the time machine of wishes.  

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Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

You confuse me. You state that they both agree to take a vacation in a hotel, then you state that they weren't going to a hotel; instead, to a time machine. Was this intentional or accidental? It's kind of confusing to understand, given the way you phrase the sentence; I'd suggest rephrasing that and stating whether an accident drove them to discover this machine, or if they knew before-hand what they were bound to find.

Though, you have started off with a really good concept for a book. However, your grammar; namely your punctuation skills; could use a tad bit of polishing. Take example the line:
"Both of them were excited to spend time away from the house to actually have a chance to spend quality time with each other."
For instance, there should be a comma after 'house' and 'to.' Rephrasing could definitely be of use here as well; to assist the literature in sounding more sophisticated. So instead of typing it out like you had, you could perhaps phrase it this way:
"Both Caroline and Jeremy were excited to spend time away from their house to be able to have quality time together."
Just a small thought.

Gah, I did it again, went a tad bit of overboard with opinions. My deepest apologies; I do hope you forgive me, I can get slightly irritating when it comes to manner of this sorts.