Essence

I dreamt within your atmosphere
our sun and moon collided.
Exploding brilliance everywhere
your ghost and I confided.

Enraptured so inside your glow
there's beauty in your power.
I watched you dance across your web
demanding every hour.

You waved your might to light the night
You've won with no resistance.
Then took flight far out of sight
and left me in your distance.

Suspended in your gravity
our stars and souls divided.
Quick to live the memory
my troubled mind provided.

I woke beyond the summer long
and felt in me your magic.
colors fade, the forest wept
on life so frail and tragic.

Reviews

[charlotte]

hello dreaming , this is very beautiful . i love how you have expressed yourself in this . it sounds very lovely , though sad how that love has to leave , only leaving good memories.. a longing for what was .. so sad to feel that magic within you from that person but no longer being able to be with them , i imagine that hurts . i enjoyed reading this

[R.E. Ray]

So, raw and gentle, an ideal balance. You've conveyed so much emotion in few well-chosen words. Beautiful piece. Nice work!

[Dreaming-Demon]

Thank you very much!

[Seriana]

This piece is very well rhymed and nicely phrased. I enjoyed the cosmic feel. Deep, colossal feelings ingrained in personal emotions. Love it!

[Thepensiveplayer]

Its interesting how powerful and invigorated we feel in and out of somebody's presence. Yet, once we've established a deep connection its like their essence stays with you. Sometimes the feelings we get are so great that we don't want to let them go. Yet, we're overcome with more feelings once we see someone go. Its just like you said, "and felt in me your magic" , that part really stuck with me because of how close I am to someone I care for. Keep up the awesome work man.

[Karmee]

so full of feelings. really touching as well.

[RBrmdz]

This perfectly describes someone coming into your life and everything is amazing until its over and all you have are good memories. The words brought vivid fantastic imagery to mind which i loved.