Tears of the Huntress

If only she had missed but once.

With her divine bow she fired

silver arrows that never once

missed their target, but

When the huntress of the moon

gazes upon his grave in the sky,
pleasant dreams rewind the fateful pull;

moonbeam blade stilled, in time.

 

For only in wishes does a lover’s life

still burn the only fire she the light-bringer

had ever known

Now, man lies upon the grasslands

watching the midnight heavens

to catch the glimpse of celestial tears,

strung loose across the void.

If only, if only,

If only she had missed.

Reviews

[LittleBear]

OH MY GOODNESS! This is so utterly and absolutely beautiful! It took my breathe away! I felt the heart in each of your words. Perfection! I am in awe

[Rashi Jain]

"man lies upon the grasslands
watching the midnight heavens"
Beautiful piece of poetry💕 I loved your style of writing.
Keep writing. Stay same😳
-Rashi

[Deviantress]

Beautiful yet sad. Tears falling like crystals from the moon.

[Sweet]

So sad, yet so beautiful.
I love this part:
"If only, if only,
If only she had missed."
It's a really good poem, thanks for sharing it ^_^

[Hyacinth]

I like this, despite the sad ending. I think that is what makes it so good, actually. Nothing in life is perfect, and we make mistakes. Sometimes those mistakes cos more than others.

Again, epic. Keep it up!

[Asteria]

I absolutely love this! It is so beautiful! Thank you for sharing.

[Jeffrey London]

Yes! This is such a beautiful and heartwrenching poem. I love this type of writing.

[DoormanDan]

I was drawn to this piece by the title. Overall, I love the imagery you used in this piece, it really gives this poem a flavor. I will admit, I'm a little uncertain as to the meaning of this poem (my guess is that it has to do with what would things be like if the Earth wasn't created or something like that), but that's not necessarily a bad thing( and it may just be me, I'm not the best with comprehending poetry at times)! This poem was a pleasure to read!

One typo though: When the huntress of the moon gazes upon HIS grave in the sky. His should be her.

Keep up the fantastic work, my fellow writer! :P

[TheRaven]

Thank you for your review and your thoughts, I appreciate the kind words.

It's not a typo though! It is meant to be 'his'. 'His grave in the sky' being the Orion constellation, as this is a bit of a recreated story of Artemis and Orion.

[Bandit1192]

Your title drew me in. A well written piece that kept me enthralled from beginning to end. Thanks for sharing.

[Bandit1192]

I enjoyed the imagery used in your poem. Well done.

[TheRaven]

Thank you!