Conquer the World, You and I

This is another love poem. About another girl that made the s**t list. Haha.

Thirty-six-hundred times Three-sixty-five
That's how many seconds
This day will survive
Then onto another
Then another again
We are but finite
A means to an end

Your clock will stop ticking
Make up for what's lost
Bring yourself to my door
No matter the cost
I want you to love me
Be more than a friend
Then I'll need you to love me
Again and again

I know it is far
Many miles away
But the road too, is finite
I'll cherish the day
That I get to love you
Again and again
We'll be perfect in love
Right up to the end

We'll conquer this land
Every city and town
Love lifted us up
She won't put us down
We'll take over the world
If it takes us forever
But surely we can
If we do it together

We have never been two
But two halves of a whole
When I get there to you
We'll again have our soul
Just wait for me baby
It will not be that long
Til we're there side-by-side
Just-a-singin our song.......

Author's Note

JG, January 2011

Reviews

[HB]

I still don't like the last line. Mmph. And I'm too tired to come up with a good alternative. Bah! I want to see it ending with "strong" somehow, since that is the image you've conjured up throughout the rest....a hearty binding, strong connection, etc.

[Lily Mae]

I love the thought of "we'll share our soul"...I'm not sure I've seen that referenced as "our" before.. I kind of like that thought:) But I'm a hopeless romantic so.. Great write..x

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

That feeling that love can conquer all, great poem my friend.

[Cerebriation]

It is supposed to leave you hanging. Enjoy the suspense! And rhyming puts restriction on your poem and forces you to be more clever. Anyone can just write words on paper. Rhyming with correct meter gives your poems style and character.

[Emily]

I really like your style.I think you have opened my eyes to rhyme.(No rhyme intended)At first I was thinking this would be a dark poem,but it surprised me.I relate to the hope in the poem.The only thing I would change is the last line.Don't leave me hanging!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Whole............two halves of a whole. Perfect......I love this one