The Accident

BOOM!!

BANG!!

          Screams fill the streets

          Sirens blare

          Rushing police cars and ambulances

All the people clear the streets

They hide in their houses

We saw nothing, we have nothing to talk to you about

Is all they will ever say

Across the street a little girl screams

           DADDY!!

A man lays flat in the doorway of an old home

The little girl shakes him vigorously

While quickly his other children join her

Six in total by his side

          Shaking and

          Screaming

An ambulance man is rushing to their aid

But the man is too far gone

There is nothing he can do

Police rangle the children

Having them sit on the curb and wait

A car pulls up a girl 24 years old gets out

Runs through the crime scene straight to the kids

Through sobs they try to explain what happened to her father,

Their father

She steps up to the plate

Takes all six kids under her wing

A different city, to her house they go

A three bedroom house with two bathrooms

Three kids to each room

Kids all depressed now also scared

What will they do?

How will they live?

The 24 year old takes on two jobs

The second eldest babysits the others

At fourteen she is learning to be a mother

She has no childhood

Its gone

Its lost

           Forever

But she sees this as salvation

She gets to be with all of her siblings

Unlike those horror stories she has heard

Of other families, of other children

All being separated from one another

Never seeing each other again

So a life with all her sisters and brothers

Is all she wants

She is happy for now

And she will be with them

            Always.

Reviews

[Vanessa Rico]

The beginning woke me up and got my attention. I love that you created a story in your poem rather than just describing how lovely a flower is or something. You made me care for these seven people and their father that had died. I felt their emotions and was rooting for them the entire time. This poem definitely does have a sad, melancholy feel to it, but that is necessary so the reader can feel exactly how displaced and upset these children are! Great job as always!

[A.E. Surdam]

A happy ending. Cool. I enjoyed reading this poem and was afraid for their happiness as I read. Great job.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

The beginning of this poem shows how many people see the accident but never do anything to help which is understandable to the point where you need to help because people are living things not random creatures who''ll bite. The melancholy of it shows how desperation clings for someone to help but also it goes toward the attachment that grows from within to others. I love this poem! Just wonderful.

[Kyle]

This is awesome. I love how the 24 year old reasons this out. These kids are lucky to have her.

[quinfinn]

this is deeply moving and seems personal, very nicely written. either experience or "law and order" influenced this, either way, it's brutally real and effective. well done!

[Chris]

A poem tied together with a story. My favorite kind of poetry. The words are all so simple yet so heavy and tense. I was able to illustrate a clear picture in my mind while I was reading.

[Jibin]

It's so interesting that you sketched up story within the poem, feeling realistic,
Really amazing, excellent work my friend.
:)

[Murisaka]

Touching, realistic, and fucked up. its harsh living, sad almost, what some people have to do just to live with the comfort of their family. But thats life, a perfect mirror of a suburban area

[Art Sun]

nice work ... you have written a story within a poem of the trajedy and the reality of so many within this world...

[lostboy]

life is sad sometimes..but you found some joy in it .i like this.