Fighting Words Of Mystery

Tearing,

Crushing,

Hitting,

Throwing,

Cursing,

Fighting,

Killing.

Enraged feelings,

Dark and black.

Fading into nothing.

Feeling all the pain.

Cutting,

Burning,

Searing,

Bruising,

Clawing,

Biting.

Fists a flying,

Words just spewing.

The pain growing deeper,

cutting deeper.

Starting to feel that fever.

Reviews

[Tasha]

i could feel all your emotions rise up in this piece, i enjoyed it a lot.

[quinfinn]

get it out...with verse. nice job!

[lostboy]

its not just black and white or gray we all have some s**t to wade through. what dont kill you makes you stronger........right...

[Crystal Kelly]

I like the buildup of words. It's almost like peeling back the layers to the answer. I like it :)

[Jibin]

Nice written, especially that words giving mystery a feeling. I love this work!
:)

[unknown]

Quite interesting I must say....these words all bring a mystery to the table!

[George Korolog]

Very strong emotional purge here. You might think about removing a few words to make it even more powerful. Fists flying, words spewing, pain growing deeper. I don't think that the "a," "just" and "the" add to the piece. Also removing "starting" and just ending with "feeling that fever."

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Instigating and each word emphasizes the mystery behind the words to describe ourselves.