Gone

Just was in one of those moods and here is the result..

I am lost

lost in your memory

all I see is you and how

you hurt me

I am longing fr someone to

come and erase you

I thought you were the one

it seeems that my foolish mind

had taken control but now I

am sitting in a dark room

waiting for someone new

someone unlike you the one

who lies, cheats, and abuses

I am waiting quietly and

slowly I dissappear

I am invisable

noone sees me, im all alone

I grab for the damn razor

but i can't grasp it,

my hand starts to bleed

I can't do anything but stare

I start shaking and

hands fall on my shoulder.

A new face,a new person

he bends down and

takes me in his arms.

"im sorry i wasn't here sooner"

He whispers

Blacking out, I wake in a bed

and a room with white walls

Getting up the floor is padded

and the walls are too

I blackout once more, thinking to myself

"am I gone? have I gone crazy?"

 

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems, i d not pay attention while im writing...

Reviews

[quinfinn]

well you may not have payed attention to the grammar but the subject was carefully and nicely crafted. an excellent reference to the throes of despair,
a little disturbing but effective . nice one.

[Daniel Atkinson]

You captured the hopeless mood very well. And superb ending. It left me thinking.

[*~DreamDeamon~*]

yes that was the intent

[cfix]

"Getting up the floor is padded
and the walls are too"
Sound as if the person is locked away.

Well presented write