The Forbidden Tree

The Forbidden Tree

A Poem by Zac


Many wonder

Why the tree is forbidden

Some try to test it

But many go

The way we choose

Is what we know

Today, tomorrow

We always disobey

We go and find

The forbidden tree

In many ways and shapes

We see the truth of it come out

We find out why it’s forbidden

We understand the responsibility

Of the forbidden tree

Many times we are forgotten

Our mysteries are attempted

To be solved

But, without a doubt the forbidden

In us, is what makes us what we are.

© 2015 Zac


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I liked the logic and the reason for the poetry.
"But, without a doubt the forbidden
In us, is what makes us what we are."
I tell people often. Don't show world all deeds and actions. Some folks will not understand. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zac

9 Years Ago

Thank you for reviewing
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.



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Beautifully deep poetry you have written there Zac. The last 2 lines are my favorite though...

"But, without a doubt the forbidden
In us, is what makes us what we are."

And they are pretty true too.. I had to re read those last lines again and again because the message just seemed so amazing to me that I just could not stop. And the entire concept that you have come up with here is also really creative. Good Job! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Zac

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the encouragement.
Moonlight

9 Years Ago

You're welcome. :)
Good work Zac... it seems like anytime something is forbidden it just makes it that much more tempting. Nice write I enjoyed this buddy!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zac

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the great review.
I like this! You portrayed your message in a really artistic way here and the poem is really well written!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zac

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much
I liked the logic and the reason for the poetry.
"But, without a doubt the forbidden
In us, is what makes us what we are."
I tell people often. Don't show world all deeds and actions. Some folks will not understand. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zac

9 Years Ago

Thank you for reviewing
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.
Humanity is about doing the forbidden, or at least the attraction of it. I like the message.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zac

9 Years Ago

This message makes me feel what life is actually like
I really like this poem!! It had strong imagery and a nice flow!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zac

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the kind review
Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Your welcome!
dude you had a message but you just couldn't weave it together.
a poem is no different from a story. except for the fact that one uses imagery instead of words to convey the message in a poem.
there isn't a single imagery in this poem to convey ur message... you used words to that.
that's why you failed. i suggest you write this again but this time use images instead of words.
i sincerely hope that i didn't hurt your feelings, i was just giving you a honest criticism.
i hope that i was of any help to you...good luck

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Ilerah

9 Years Ago

Ah your welcome man, though I didn't do much!
Zac

9 Years Ago

You guys are being a great help.
Good at writing poems! Great poem here

Posted 9 Years Ago


Zac

9 Years Ago

Thank you
I am honoured

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Zac

Rocky View, Alberta, Canada



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