Broken

November 2011

Daily struggle

   Twisting

      Deep

         Pain

Broken without sores

   Tendons taut

      Snapping

         Lost

Feeling useless

   Inadequate

      Forgotten

         Worn

Searching for peace

For calm

For sanity

For me

Strength eludes me

   Progress slow

      Tedious

         Persistent

Breathe

   Wait

      Work

         Patience

Author's Note

This is a reference to my struggles with my RSI..it's a daily boulder I carry.

Reviews

[Groovy]

An emotive write - Well written.

[Coyote Poetry]

Great use of language in the poem. I like the pace of the poem. Allow the reader to follow along in the desire of the writer.
"Searching for peace
For calm
For sanity
For me"
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I can feel your pain... you have conveyed it so vividly. I like the format and red color you used in this piece, it adds a dramatic visual. Nice job!

[HiddenFantasies]

I found I very much enjoyed this poem. Strange formatting is normally lost on me, but somehow I think it fits your poem and adds to it in this case. Very well done.

[Break The Broken]

Feeling useless
Inadequate
Forgotten
Worn
lovvved it!!!

[Desmund Tiny]

this poem is intense with strong emotions flows through the lines...... great write

[Boldpen]

Wow!!
a piece a lot people can relate too.
True words. You beautifully fitted all the expressions of life in a single, brilliant poem.
Amazing!!!!!

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

I can really relate to this flow of emotions...nice write; I really like the red words, they add an interesting sense of immediacy to the poem. :)

[Lady of the Ring]

Wow, that's intense.
I'm sure that you can make it through.

[TawnyBlueStar]

wow! :D
lovely poem