Anthony.

In the distance lies a beautiful flower blooming oh so lovely, yearning for my touch. burning a hole in my heart leaving trails of ashes..caressing and embracing my body,

  flesh with flesh, parted lips with dancing tongues dancing ever so lightly only seeking the beauty that lies in the abyss of my soul. can you feel me?

 Touch me I say.

  Breath into me, let us combine our bodies mixing our chemicals extracting our juices. Re-acting, demolishing, proliferating....inclining our lust for one another.

Can you see what I see?

 Feel the escense of my heart beating only for you.

 When our minds play a part, it feels like a thousands of

  butterflies are making homes in my tummy.

Reviews

[Taylor_McCutcheon]

My favorite line was the "When our minds play a part, it feels like a thousands of
butterflies are making homes in my tummy." I thought it was a great mix of innocence, lust fullness and cuteness. I enjoyed it.

My least favorite line in the poem was "flesh with flesh, parted lips with dancing tongues dancing ever so lightly only seeking the beauty that lies in the abyss of my soul. can you feel me?" Only because of the lack of punctuation made it difficult for me to follow and understand. Nothing against the word choices.

I loved how the poem was called Anthony (so its obviously about a guy) but the beginning makes you think youre talking about a flower. I thought it was clever.

I felt the poems flow was a bit choppy and the lack of punctuation through me off a bit. But thats only because im dyslexic so its hard for me to read that stuff anyway.

I did enjoy this poem and I would give it 4/5 :)

[Tatiana Casali]

Yeah I know it's written kinda funny.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cob..]