Illusions
A Poem by
The Ugly Rose
Oh, sweet embrace
A kiss
A touch
Love!
No, just a glance.
Oh, lovely eyes
Those lips
Those hands
Passion!
No, just a dream.
Oh, promising hope
My future
My desire
A life!
No, just a lie.
© 2010 The Ugly Rose
Reviews
this is beautiful!! the passion is captured so beautifully and the emotion is well expressed here. Good Job
Posted 13 Years Ago
Its gorgeous! The passion would've been lost if it were too long, and you captured the emotion wonderfully.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Its gorgeous! The passion would've been lost if it were too long, and you captured the emotion wonderfully.
It's short, but still holds emotion. Very nicely done ^^. Love the repeating 'No, just a ...'
Posted 14 Years Ago
It's short, but still holds emotion. Very nicely done ^^. Love the repeating 'No, just a ...'
i love this! i'd completely ditch the last stanza though. i think it holds up on its own without that last one. the last one makes it seem like you are editorializing it. the rest is amazing!
Posted 14 Years Ago
i love this! i'd completely ditch the last stanza though. i think it holds up on its own without that last one. the last one makes it seem like you are editorializing it. the rest is amazing!
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Added on January 24, 2010
Last Updated on March 2, 2010
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The Ugly Rose Calgary, Canada
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