Lost, Are We?

Lost, Are We?

A Poem by ~Dragon X
"

It's bad to ask for help when you're in bad places. Especially when you're in bad places.

"

Ah, who might you be?

Lost, aimless as me?

 

Oh, dreadful thing;

Tired, worn, meandering,

As blind as a bat,

Darting like a rat.

 

Wouldn't you love to escape this darkness?

This chasm, this trench, this endlessness?

I offer a way,

An escape, I say.

 

But you see, I get ever so lonely,

Few wander this way.

Wouldn’t you mind staying,

Just for a day…?

 

 Or maybe two, or three, or four,

I think you’ll stay for many more… 

© 2011 ~Dragon X


Author's Note

~Dragon X
A poem I wrote about a year ago. Friends told me they liked it, so I want to know what the internet has to say :D

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i like it too
it's really good keep going

Posted 12 Years Ago


its very good

Posted 12 Years Ago


This was in a way, for me, funny. Getting lost in the wrong place, with the wrong people at the wrong time... Some luck huh? But the poem was great! I only offer one piece of criticism- the line "darting as a rat". Perhaps another word to describe the person who is lost besides "darting"? Sorry if I offended you, its just me. Overall though, I loved the poem!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I suppose every once in a while people turn into this 'dreadful thing'. What matters is how long they chose to stay... a day or two or eternity. excellent poem. brought out a relevant concept in a novel style. nice :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


a really awesome poem. good job :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


you want to know what the internet has to say? the internet says: "ITS AMAZING!" :))

Posted 12 Years Ago


Love it :) Like others mentioned, I have no criticism to offer either. Flawless piece. This was just great!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow, I love your vivid descriptions! Great job!
Isn't it sickening that that's the way our world has become? People say that they can help, but really they're just luring you into a sense of false security so that they can pounce on you like a cat pounces on an unsuspecting mouse. o.o

Anyway, as always, great job! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Sunny ( Soondos :D ),


Fantastic. I have no criticism to offer. Love this! :) Keep it up~



Posted 12 Years Ago


Dragon X,

This is a very awesome poem! I love how everything works together and the way that you place your reader's mind in a pit of loneliness and make them hope for a way out.

Great Job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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