This was in a way, for me, funny. Getting lost in the wrong place, with the wrong people at the wrong time... Some luck huh? But the poem was great! I only offer one piece of criticism- the line "darting as a rat". Perhaps another word to describe the person who is lost besides "darting"? Sorry if I offended you, its just me. Overall though, I loved the poem!
I suppose every once in a while people turn into this 'dreadful thing'. What matters is how long they chose to stay... a day or two or eternity. excellent poem. brought out a relevant concept in a novel style. nice :)
Wow, I love your vivid descriptions! Great job!
Isn't it sickening that that's the way our world has become? People say that they can help, but really they're just luring you into a sense of false security so that they can pounce on you like a cat pounces on an unsuspecting mouse. o.o
This is a very awesome poem! I love how everything works together and the way that you place your reader's mind in a pit of loneliness and make them hope for a way out.
hi I'm basically a ghost here now
I show up once in a blue moon
I'm all over this nifty lil place called wattpad now, but my writing still sucks so don't go there
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