2. Diner Dash

The team go to a little out of the diner where a tiny bit of trouble appears, and more about our Fed agents is revealed.

Sadie pulled into the diner parking lot with a loud roar. Jesse turned the key and the monstrous rumble died out. “Hey, um… you two stay here and I’ll go check on the diner to make sure it’s safe.” Jesse cocked his service side arm and smiled with a cocky grin. Sometimes Colin thought Jesse’d like a diner or bar to clean out. He hadn’t done that in months.

                Natalie tapped on Colin’s shoulder from the back seat. “Sir, why’d he say he had to check the diner?” She had a confused and worried look on her face.

                Colin wasn’t sure how to answer it. She was a big girl now and should know. “First, you don’t have to call me sir. Now, we don’t exactly play by the book. We have a lot of unclosed cases, and we have arrested and yes, even shot a couple people. We have few friends and a whole lot of enemies. Your time with us will not be a simple patrol in a squad cruiser.”

                Natalie sat there for a moment registering. Are these guys going to get me killed? Are they cops or vigilantes? And why does this guy keep eye balling me?! “Wow, thanks for being… so open.”

                Colin put a light hand on her shoulder. “I just want you to know what you’ve fallen into and that I am prepared to protect you.” This guy may be damn attractive, but he’s kind of creeping me out! Should I taize or mace this guy if he tries anything? And why isn’t his partner like this? I expected it from him!

 

                Jesse came jogging back to Sadie. Hey tapped on the window and Colin rolled it down. “It’s all good. Lets’ go get some food and turn in to the motel early. We’ll fill up Sadie and hit the road in the morning.” The other two got out of Sadie and walked to the diner. At the door Colin let Jesse pass and then he opened the door for Natalie. Jesse pointed to a corner booth and told her to wait just a minute. He about-faced and went back to Colin right behind them.

                “Boy I swear I will murder your short black a*s!” Jesse was showing his temper without being too loud and drawing attention.

                “Jess, you’re like two inches taller than me! And you said I could have this one!”

                Jesse was blowing out anger. “Yeah, but you don’t have to be an obvious a*s about it! Besides, what have I ever done to you?”

                “Oh I don’t know Jess… got me shot last month?” It was Colin’s turn to be upset.

                Jesse wasn’t done though. “Dude, it was last month! You’re still here aren’t you? God! I’m going to get chili. Be a little girl if you want.” Jesse was half way between the booth and Colin by the door. “Ha! That makes you a lesbian you sick freak!” Jesse just realized he pretty much screamed it. He nervously looked around, seeing who heard him. He saw two girls sharing one malt with two straws staring at him. He turned to them and waived with a crooked smile. “It’s okay though, you two are hot enough to make it work.”

                Natalie gently put a napkin on the table and buried her face in it. Jesse saw all the disgusted faces. “Well damn.” He jogged over to Colin still by the door who was trying not to explode. “You get my chili, and when you bring it to the truck when you and Natalie are done.  And don’t take forever!” He left the diner as he was out f breath from talking so fast.

 

                “So Colin, what was that about?” Natalie sucked on her malt and just looked at him, ten to the truck where she could see Jesse sitting there patiently listening to music. She kept watching as Colin was making up some B.S. excuse that was a lie. He couldn’t actually tell her. It’s not like she’d hear him while she watched the large man walk purposely towards Sadie.

                She kept watching as the large biker wrapped on the window and woke up Jesse. She could see the man was animated and upset. She saw Jesse up a finger and roll the window down. The biker got in his face and Jesse simply opened the door, hitting him in the face and sending him to his a*s. Natalie dropped her food and ran out in worry. She stopped and watched as Jesse destroyed this man that must have been 6’9 compared to Jesse’s already impressive 6’4.

                He sat on the biker’s back pulling his hair. “I’m not gay you retard!” Jesse slammed his face in the pavement at the insult. He picked up the biker’s head with a gushing and broken nose. “We done yet a*s hole?”

                The biker laughed as blood entered his mouth. “Oh my bad. That s**t in the corner booth you kept watching must be your b***h. I bet my Bisexual girlfriend you said was hot, would have a lot of fun with…” He was interrupted by Jesse’s boot hitting his teeth.

                “Now we’re done.” Jesse spit on the fetal biker and looked up to see Natalie standing there, mouth wide open. “Um… hey Natalie.” He waived and gave a half smile, but fully awkward. She just waived back and went back inside. “That wasn’t supposed to happen at all.”

Author's Note

Hope you guys like this. A bit of crude humor, so if it's offensive, I openly apologize. Please review good or bad!

Reviews

[Decanter Red]

Well, I do have a few comments to make:

1. Space your writing out! It looks too cramped and uncomfortable!
2. When I read your story, the sentences seemed to choppy because they may be too short. It's allright to have short sentences, but if every single one is as short, it makes the story feel...awkward. Try mix and matching the lengths.
3. You need to practice on the flow of your piece. It does take some work and consistency in writing to better that aspect, but trust me, it's well worth it.

Overall, I find this a casual read, very entertaining in terms of content. Plus, I do like the chapter title 'diner dash'. Reminds me of some games in the apple appstore haha!