The Day We Died

older poem

Did I try and impress you?

Life isn’t the fantasy we see

Sitting here watching T.V.

Did I try to help you?

So strange I don’t recall.

There is an omnipotent feeling

To stop us from healing

The wounds we are dealing.

Did I try and talk to you?

Sorry I’ll just go away.

Is rain the tears we cry

Wishing we could fly

And escape the knowledge that we will die.

Do I know your name?

From the days I was lost

I have been filled with dread

Wondering if my thirst will ever be fed

Even when I walk with the dead.

 

Do I know your face?

From the days I walked in the rain

And here I find your tombstone

I will dance all upon your bones

But I will still be alone.

If I did I’m sorry.

I don’t know what came over me

Reviews

[Emily Irene.]

I really liked this one. I can relate to it in my own way, which always makes me like reading more. I liked a few of your poems, but this one is probably my favorite. :]

[Bluet_Belle]

This makes me think of a Violent Femmes song. I cant quite recall the name of it:-s

I like this.

Its kind of like a amnesiatic reality slap at the begining then it goes on to disillusionment further, and finally desecration of the dead.

It is an interesting piece and i have to agree with Gorgeous below, you are a tallented writer.

The scene plays out as you read it and not many people can do that properly.

Kudos, brava, etcetera:P

[Last Lying Look]

This was excellent. I love the overall piece.
It went together so well. :)
YEAH! WOOOT WOOOOOT!
Your a magnificent writer.

[lAcEy_LoO's Poems Site]

Wow i liked it!!! Very good!!!