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My body is cold

My lungs are on fire

I can no longer hear the screams from above

I looked down and the abyss

Was staring back at me

No more struggling

I have accepted my fate

However I confess

I think it’s a shame

You’ll never know how the ocean burns

Reviews

[lAcEy_LoO's Poems Site]

Wow... it was great!!! You have some talent about you Mr. McDuffie!!!

[Des]

Wow, that was really good. It makes me never want to go into water for fear of drowning. But all together, flows well, and I like how it never really states that its about drowning. It makes me read between the lines. I loved it.