My Love

Dedicated to someone special who is now gone

 

To my love I picked a rose-

The day was fresh in my mind, as we held hands,

And let the water wash over our toes.

I looked in your eyes and my heart skipped a beat-

We were meant for one another,

Our love was meant to be.

You grabbed my hand and home we went,

To spend our days together watching sunsets,

Then one day you grew ill,

You seemed to vanish before my eyes,

Drowning in a mountain of pills.

My love it was a sight to see-

But I’m glad you knew how much you meant to me,

You saw my daughter grow up in your last days,

Then one day God took you, you lay asleep in his last rays.

The pain is fresh but you’re still in our hearts-

Know we always loved you and our souls will never part.

Reviews

[MistyJRose]

*disclaimer* not very good with structure of poetry but i always say what i think about it and look for any misspellings and grammar issues. on to the critique:

This was awesome, i can feel your love then your pain as the poem progressed. this was beautifully written.

Very touching and emotional. This describes in great detail how a perfect relationship can be stolen from you and described perfectly the pain and frustration of watching someone close to you wither away and be in so much pain. It described the hopelessness you feel in this situation. I'm so sorry for your loss.

[Molly Lawrence]

I'm so sorry for your loss. I can completely relate. Losing your true love is always hard. Thank you for sharing such a painful thing.