Senryu: Envied clouds

I envy those clouds, 

They roam freely without fear, 

Nor blossoming tears. 

 - Stu. T.H. (November 22, 2023)

Reviews

[zeronineight]

Huh. This is interesting. The reactions it elicits in me as I read it is also interesting. At first, it give me a wistful feeling, longing for the imagery of the free clouds above me. Then it makes me think. "Nor blossoming tears." Science teaches us that clouds will sooner turn into rain, a downpour even. Doesn't that imply tears will somehow follow -- maybe after a while, when we're not looking. Are they still the same clouds when they've mixed with others and turned heavy enough to rain?

In the end is the person also just envious of an image, an outside perspective from far away? Envy is a familiar friend we can't help but welcome with longing stares into the sky where the clouds roam free.

I think it's beautiful, the talent you have to paint so many images, string together so many stories in the freedom of your readers' brains with so little words. Thank you for sharing. That was a wonderful experience to read.

[Stu. T.H.]

The work also says a thing or two about us who envy clouds, yes? Perhaps we at times are devoid of reasons, growing jealous of those we do not fully understand.
"Even those as clouds have depths." But we tend to be ignorant about it ~ Quite an observant conclusion you've reached, author zeronineight.

[Chris Shaw]

Islands in the sky. I envy them too. Drifting along in their own time. Cotton white and billowing. No threat of rain. I like the visuals you gave with this senryu. Nicely presented.

Chris

[Stu. T.H.]

Kindly thank you for stopping by and reviewing, author Chris Shaw.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and I envy anything that doesn't cry.

or maybe not, because it is better to feel and cry than not to feel at all.
another excellent short piece...
j.

[Stu. T.H.]

I used to more curious than I am now, and back then, I used to wonder if clouds are freed from mortal wounds, perhaps that is why they can fly so high and so free in the sky. Now I wonder if they are elevated by their ignorance, arrogance or have they attained enlightenment in existence. Who knows~