Young Hearts

I wrote this more than 10 years ago. I'm publishing old stuff to wake up my muse. He's been sleeping on the job, lately.

I thought I was in love

I made my mind believe

My heart knew the truth

But my eyes just wouldn't see

The maturity of my heart

and mind is not yet enough

I am only a fresh life

who has yet to believe in love

My mind fooled me once

But, my heart lit the way

revealing the possibility, for me

to Love someone someday

But now is not the time

and you are not the face

I will meet someone new

and always think of you

I will ask my mind if it is true

It will tell me this love is hot

My heart will say, then again...maybe not.

Author's Note

Keep in mind I was 15 when I wrote this. ;-)

Thanks Lily for the advice!

Reviews

[Lily1111]

Digging in the archives are you? lol I thought this conveyed a lot of emotion. Amazing that you were only 15 when you wrote it. The flow and rhymes were extremely good.

The only place that I tripped up a little on the rhythm when reading it was:

My mind fooled me once
But, my heart lit the way
It showed me that it
is possible, for me
to Love someone someday

If you are open to suggestions, maybe shorten the line

"It showed me that it is possible, for me"

to:

Revealing the possibility

Just my thoughts. But don't change it unless you really think it will improve it. They are your thoughts, words and emotions and that makes it perfect just the way it is.

[Stephan]

A very young-spirited poem. I like the concept of how the heart disagrees with the mind when it comes to love.