Aglow

 

Aglow...

            The Sailor and the Siren                     

                                   

The sailor’s thoughts were cautious
as the sails the wind made full.

He’d left this place on many trips,
and each with fear upon his lips.

 

A while ago, quite by mistake,
he spied a course that he might take.

And as he watched a bird in flight,
he thought about the coming night.

 

Yet every time he’d left this port,
strong wind and waves were his report.

…‘tis true of each time we set sail,
the chance exists that we might fail.

 

For creaking of the masts and yards
is just how every journey starts.

~

An old man whom he did not know,
approached him now, his pipe aglow.

Resting his elbows on the rail,
the old man told to him this tale….

 

In every bird that spreads its wings

is that of which the siren sings.

For birds are not what you might think;
each is a love joined by a link,

a special bond which rises high, 
as our love soars up to the sky.

Above the waters of the Earth,

each love in them displays its worth.

 

The sailor who had heard this song
now thought to love her, right or wrong.

Reviews

[KAREN]

Beautiful, breath taking tale! A solid write indeed! Great flow and imaegry!

[Gandré]

Oh, I loved this, Donn. You always put smile on my lips when you write stories within the poem. I like your talent and it is always worth reading.

[Doreen]

Quite a pleasurable read. The inconsistencies that I noticed have already been pointed out. Vivid in description and a wonderful little story within. Nice.

[ettorney]

This is a lovely gentle poem.

The rhythm and flow is pleasing except it stumbles just a bit here: …‘tis true of each time we set sail".
Better: …‘tis true each time that we set sail.
This syntax matches the flow of the previous lines. You can also replace "that" with when or hence or ah or a etc..

Oh. Upon rereading it the first and second lines are also out of rhythm. Better:
The sailor’s thoughts were cautious
as the wind made full the sails.

[Ellen Hammond]

This is beautiful! Great rhyme and flow and an intriguing tale. And of course, anything connected with the sea captures my interest anyway. But this is a delightful read, my friend.