A Poem

An impossible love story.

I needn’t stroke your silken hair
or touch rose petal skin.
The type of love I have for you....
it burns from deep within.

While in my soul the fires rage,
and nothing is consumed.
My spirit wanders aimlessly,
from room to darkened room.

The proper words I cannot say,
to show you my great love.
Yet here I’m staring at your face,
while you look from above.

Still my heart stirs with great desire,
to reach up and touch you.
As these feelings that I’m feeling,
I know they’re in you too.

 

But you will someday think of me,
when this book you have closed.
And I am just a memory....
and not the one you chose.

Alas...
Of all that I have looked up at,
‘tis you I wished I’d known.
For yours is a breathing spirit,
and mine.... I’m just a poem.

 

A Sean Allen Poem

© 2006 D McDaniel Hayden

Reviews

[Edward James]

With 50+ reviews, I doubt I can tell you anything new or groundbreaking as far as analysis goes, so I'll say that I really do like this poem. I'm a sucker for old fashioned rhyme schemes and rhythm, and not being a visual person, for me the aural sensation of reading a poem is quite often every bit as important as the message conveyed. Saying that, I love the pulse of this piece, and the idea that a poem (whether yours or someone else's) is observing and caring for you in the same way you do it is quite pleasant. I think I may have to reevaluate some poetry after reading this.

Nice write, I look forward to reading more

Edward

[Tate Morgan]

That was exquisite this stanza was as sweet as the finest wine and goosebumps were all on my skin as i read this divinely inspired poem. AS you know i love the rhyme in poetry and speak from the heart I think one does better to write of what he knows and has lived as the reader can feel the true pain and love

[Amber Nicole]

Another keeper, but then again you already knew that. You have such a way with words. I always enjoy your work.

[Tomás Ó C..]

You can be a hapy writer... I really enjoyed this poem...

[Big ol' Kahuna]

Nicely done. I am sure there is not a lot I can say that hasn't been said already about it, but this was beautifully laid out. I liked the rhyme, rhythm, and structure a lot. I also like the pause created before the last stanza, as it really helps to drive it home.
Nice emotion, great poem.

[fireblossom]

I wish I had the ability you show to reflect quietly on powerful emotions. I write like I'm breaking out of jail or sky diving, very participatory...so I lose the reflective quality that is such a great strength in your writing. This is a very brave poem. You show your deepest longing in such a fine way.

[Honeypot]

I enjoyed this poem very much. The flow and cadence of it was spot on in my unprofessional opinion. I will say that as I read it I almost expected there to be a twist in it and I think it was how the poem kept talking about looking up, or reaching up. I think the poem metaphor was very good and left me wondering is it about a poem or the person behind it.

Really wonderful job in the writing and the idea. You did good!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Love need not be spoken for it can be conveyed without a sound... a very beautiful and romantic piece of literature... timeless love knows no bounds.

[Ellen Hammond]

This is so touching, a somewhat bittersweet poem which speaks to the heart. I love the ending too. nice twist.

[BABSIE BEE]

Ahhhhhhhhhhh.What one always thinks and never records... I loved this soooo much. It,s sad but cleverly put together. Thanks for allowing me to share.
BBXX

[Phantom Heart]

Well this is just fantastic. A beautifully written piece, with an superb ending. Very well done.