A Poem

An impossible love story.

I needn’t stroke your silken hair
or touch rose petal skin.
The type of love I have for you....
it burns from deep within.

While in my soul the fires rage,
and nothing is consumed.
My spirit wanders aimlessly,
from room to darkened room.

The proper words I cannot say,
to show you my great love.
Yet here I’m staring at your face,
while you look from above.

Still my heart stirs with great desire,
to reach up and touch you.
As these feelings that I’m feeling,
I know they’re in you too.

 

But you will someday think of me,
when this book you have closed.
And I am just a memory....
and not the one you chose.

Alas...
Of all that I have looked up at,
‘tis you I wished I’d known.
For yours is a breathing spirit,
and mine.... I’m just a poem.

 

A Sean Allen Poem

© 2006 D McDaniel Hayden

Reviews

[Edward James]

With 50+ reviews, I doubt I can tell you anything new or groundbreaking as far as analysis goes, so I'll say that I really do like this poem. I'm a sucker for old fashioned rhyme schemes and rhythm, and not being a visual person, for me the aural sensation of reading a poem is quite often every bit as important as the message conveyed. Saying that, I love the pulse of this piece, and the idea that a poem (whether yours or someone else's) is observing and caring for you in the same way you do it is quite pleasant. I think I may have to reevaluate some poetry after reading this.

Nice write, I look forward to reading more

Edward

[Doreen]

A very sweet sentiment, a bit sad at the same time. I enjoyed reading this and thought it well written in pace and message. Well done.

[S.G.]

This is definitely more than just a poem, I want to keep reading it all day long. It's one of those poems where, you reach the final word and it makes you smile so you read it again =)

Thank you

[Emmmaaa! ;D]

This is a lovely poem.
I enjoyed it. (:

[Gheeneil]

Such is a pure expression of unspoken love. More often than not, it is harder to let the object of affection know how one feels rather than find the right words to convey the emotion. Though we have a way with words to express how we feel, it is still different when the emotion is personally shared with the person. Afterall, the poem, no matter how beautifully written, is just a collection of words and thoughts. This is quite deep, Sean.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Same here.. what can i say. It is perfectly written, beautiful in content and very emotional.

Chloe

[Luxovious Sloane]

I'm rather perplexed by this stanza:

"But you will someday think of me,
when this book you have closed.
And I am just a memory...
and not the one you chose."

I interpreted this poem to describe your relationship with a loved one who died, which was beautifully crafted, but i am curious by what you were trying to say in this stanza. Hmm...

[THERISA]

Alas a latecomer to here
All of the best words taken
Yet does not diminish my enjoyment
Of a poem about a poem.

Giving life to a creative idea
Stroke of pure brilliance
On the highest scale
Only wish
I had thought of it
First.

[Dylan Patrick]

I like the personification you give to the poem, and its a very well written personification. You express the poem's feelings very well. It was fun to read. Well done.