A Poem

An impossible love story.

I needn’t stroke your silken hair
or touch rose petal skin.
The type of love I have for you....
it burns from deep within.

While in my soul the fires rage,
and nothing is consumed.
My spirit wanders aimlessly,
from room to darkened room.

The proper words I cannot say,
to show you my great love.
Yet here I’m staring at your face,
while you look from above.

Still my heart stirs with great desire,
to reach up and touch you.
As these feelings that I’m feeling,
I know they’re in you too.

 

But you will someday think of me,
when this book you have closed.
And I am just a memory....
and not the one you chose.

Alas...
Of all that I have looked up at,
‘tis you I wished I’d known.
For yours is a breathing spirit,
and mine.... I’m just a poem.

 

A Sean Allen Poem

© 2006 D McDaniel Hayden

Reviews

[Edward James]

With 50+ reviews, I doubt I can tell you anything new or groundbreaking as far as analysis goes, so I'll say that I really do like this poem. I'm a sucker for old fashioned rhyme schemes and rhythm, and not being a visual person, for me the aural sensation of reading a poem is quite often every bit as important as the message conveyed. Saying that, I love the pulse of this piece, and the idea that a poem (whether yours or someone else's) is observing and caring for you in the same way you do it is quite pleasant. I think I may have to reevaluate some poetry after reading this.

Nice write, I look forward to reading more

Edward

[Chris Barker]

This is a fantastic poem! This has so much reviews and everyone has said what needs to be said about this simplistic yet fantastic piece of literature. Great write!

[Desert Dreamer]

As if the poem is speaking, such a beautiful poem.

[clishmaclaver]

This is the first review I have ever written because I feel comfortable and encouraged by what you write and how you write it. The simple way in which you encapsulate the feelings that we have all experienced, is amazing. Your economy of simple words deliver a powerful punch. The intensity of love, the pain of love and the eternal gratitude of love is something we should all experience. I'll learn a lot from reading your writings.
Thank you

Clishmaclaver

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

The last line got me here..it completes the poem in such a skilled way,and with such sheer talent.Personifying poem is a very novel theme in itself,not many must have thought about it.

[Another Relic]

What a great poem Sean. I loved how you told it like a story and the rhymes and rhythm were great. Ending was excellent. I'm impressed. Great job.

[MagiCrystal]

You have nailed me to my soul and my cross.. you have the ability to take me back and fort with your passionate poetry..My friend.. what a magical poem
all the reviews you have got are amazing.. I read them all.. and I say..
Bravo.. Bravo.. Bravo.. Are you a poet ? LOL
Yes.. and a timeless one.. amen

[Wicahpi]

I really enjoyed reading this poem.
I especially like reading the last two stanzas.
Though I enjoyed the first three very much, too.
Good job in crafting this little gem.

[Jennifer Pennington]

Absolutely fantastic piece of writing.

[zendikar]

Wow! well thats the first word that came to mind the second word was awesome :D great poem wish i wrote this well I am spastic with my writing haha, keep on keeping on as they say! thanks for the great read!

[Robyn]

Absolutely brilliant!
of all the poems i have read on this website, this is by far my favorite! my favorite part is "The type of love I have for you...
it burns from deep within."

and i also love the idea of comparing to a book being closed...just a memory, not the book you chose.

wow, absolutely brilliant!