A Poem

An impossible love story.

I needn’t stroke your silken hair
or touch rose petal skin.
The type of love I have for you....
it burns from deep within.

While in my soul the fires rage,
and nothing is consumed.
My spirit wanders aimlessly,
from room to darkened room.

The proper words I cannot say,
to show you my great love.
Yet here I’m staring at your face,
while you look from above.

Still my heart stirs with great desire,
to reach up and touch you.
As these feelings that I’m feeling,
I know they’re in you too.

 

But you will someday think of me,
when this book you have closed.
And I am just a memory....
and not the one you chose.

Alas...
Of all that I have looked up at,
‘tis you I wished I’d known.
For yours is a breathing spirit,
and mine.... I’m just a poem.

 

A Sean Allen Poem

© 2006 D McDaniel Hayden

Reviews

[Edward James]

With 50+ reviews, I doubt I can tell you anything new or groundbreaking as far as analysis goes, so I'll say that I really do like this poem. I'm a sucker for old fashioned rhyme schemes and rhythm, and not being a visual person, for me the aural sensation of reading a poem is quite often every bit as important as the message conveyed. Saying that, I love the pulse of this piece, and the idea that a poem (whether yours or someone else's) is observing and caring for you in the same way you do it is quite pleasant. I think I may have to reevaluate some poetry after reading this.

Nice write, I look forward to reading more

Edward

[JlB]

Yes, i'm sure you already know this poem is wonderful,

Good usage of 'alas'
vivid, wonderful

Jl Brooks

[JlB]

Yes, i'm sure you already know this poem is wonderful,

Good usage of 'alas'
vivid, wonderful

Jl Brooks

[Missphit]

This is sad.....yes lovely, beautiful amazing as other wrote, but mostly just sad. Here's a great big sloppy wet kiss and a much needed hug =)

[Norma M Sutton]

This is lovely!

[Creepy Swine Guy]

I liked this poem as I read along ... but then I read the last stanza. I love this poem. It feels to me like this MUST be about a longing for someone very real.

[Autumn M. Miller aka Mo..]

This poem actually brought tears to my eyes! Very beautiful and heartbreaking. Whoever inspired this or the memory or simple feeling that did is tremendous. Definately will be one of my favorites.

[Autumn M. Miller aka Mo..]

This poem actually brought tears to my eyes! Very beautiful and heartbreaking. Whoever inspired this or the memory or simple feeling that did is tremendous. Definately will be one of my favorites.

[C. Brittian Gaspard]

fantastic read. it's the classis love never had tale.
i absolutely love it.

[Back To William]

i've had to read this four a five times, and I still havent gotten my head around it. I wasn't expecting the need to examine and rexamine what at first seemed like "just another love poem"

so then, my opinion is that I care enough to try and explore your writing. inducing that sort of passionate relationship between your work and a reader is the highest achievement.

[Richard Hartshorn]

very nice. the simplicity actually makes it work better with the subject matter you're covering. Good stuff.