A Poem

An impossible love story.

I needn’t stroke your silken hair
or touch rose petal skin.
The type of love I have for you....
it burns from deep within.

While in my soul the fires rage,
and nothing is consumed.
My spirit wanders aimlessly,
from room to darkened room.

The proper words I cannot say,
to show you my great love.
Yet here I’m staring at your face,
while you look from above.

Still my heart stirs with great desire,
to reach up and touch you.
As these feelings that I’m feeling,
I know they’re in you too.

 

But you will someday think of me,
when this book you have closed.
And I am just a memory....
and not the one you chose.

Alas...
Of all that I have looked up at,
‘tis you I wished I’d known.
For yours is a breathing spirit,
and mine.... I’m just a poem.

 

A Sean Allen Poem

© 2006 D McDaniel Hayden

Reviews

[Edward James]

With 50+ reviews, I doubt I can tell you anything new or groundbreaking as far as analysis goes, so I'll say that I really do like this poem. I'm a sucker for old fashioned rhyme schemes and rhythm, and not being a visual person, for me the aural sensation of reading a poem is quite often every bit as important as the message conveyed. Saying that, I love the pulse of this piece, and the idea that a poem (whether yours or someone else's) is observing and caring for you in the same way you do it is quite pleasant. I think I may have to reevaluate some poetry after reading this.

Nice write, I look forward to reading more

Edward

[the eyeball kid]

great poem ...excently put..love the ending

[Alexandria Wilson]

THis is so touching. My heart truly felt these words and I thank you for this exposure.

[Brenda Barnhart]

Beautifully written and unique... and deeply stirring. I love it! ~Brenda

[V]

nice ending. clever.

V

[Sonashree]

This is a wonderful work of art. I am at a loss of words explaining how much I liked it .You are becoming my inspiration !

[Ilene M.W. Lush]

wow. the piece took a turn that made me sit back in my chair.

But you will some day think of me,
when my book you have closed.
And I am just a memory...
and not the one you chose.

concise lines.

[Krystal Waters]

Sentimental and flowing. Descriptive and easy to follow. I can't think of anything you could change in this poem. It's you... It's all you.

[Amber Victoria Tudor]

I love the last line, "For yours is a breathing spirit,
and mine... I�m just a poem." Very beautiful poem.

[M J Moore]

Amazing. The words here are beautiful, and it just flows off the page. Deeply sentimental, the feelings of loss, love, and something that we just can't have or even touch, are all expressed here wonderfully.

Great job, Sean.

[Gordon Greene]

"Yet in my soul the fires rage,
but nothing is consumed."
The first hint of the Divine that runs throughout the poem.
Very meaningful.
G.G.