A Poem

An impossible love story.

I needn’t stroke your silken hair
or touch rose petal skin.
The type of love I have for you....
it burns from deep within.

While in my soul the fires rage,
and nothing is consumed.
My spirit wanders aimlessly,
from room to darkened room.

The proper words I cannot say,
to show you my great love.
Yet here I’m staring at your face,
while you look from above.

Still my heart stirs with great desire,
to reach up and touch you.
As these feelings that I’m feeling,
I know they’re in you too.

 

But you will someday think of me,
when this book you have closed.
And I am just a memory....
and not the one you chose.

Alas...
Of all that I have looked up at,
‘tis you I wished I’d known.
For yours is a breathing spirit,
and mine.... I’m just a poem.

 

A Sean Allen Poem

© 2006 D McDaniel Hayden

Reviews

[Edward James]

With 50+ reviews, I doubt I can tell you anything new or groundbreaking as far as analysis goes, so I'll say that I really do like this poem. I'm a sucker for old fashioned rhyme schemes and rhythm, and not being a visual person, for me the aural sensation of reading a poem is quite often every bit as important as the message conveyed. Saying that, I love the pulse of this piece, and the idea that a poem (whether yours or someone else's) is observing and caring for you in the same way you do it is quite pleasant. I think I may have to reevaluate some poetry after reading this.

Nice write, I look forward to reading more

Edward

[Ice QueenJen]

Such a very lovely poem, Sean

[Ilene M.W. Lush]

I don't remember if I reviewed this before, but I remember having the pleasure of hearing you read it.

It is a lovely lamentation. I appreciate the simple heartfelt rhyme. I think it is beautiful.

sincerely
Ilene

[Eric]

Bitter sweet on a number of levels. I thought you might be referring to a male/female relationship, and then you don't. I enjoyed the thought of a poem considering me the way I consider her.

This poem is good company for me tonight as I go to sleep. Thanks for sending her to me.

[C. Marie Says, "do..]

oh, gosh, this made my eyes well! such a lovely piece! so much more than a poem, as it lives inside of you! :)

[* Mourning Starr *]

A very beautifully written piece and a lovely tribute to what each and every one of us here create every day......You have indeed captured the essence of the poem....

[Ken Simm.]

Excellent and unashamedly romantic. I'm an ashamed romantic. Reminds me of Pre Raphealite poetry. Regards Ken.

[Helen Woodward]

Beautiful, tearful (for me) Sad and compelling all at the same time Sean. What a loving tribute!
Gosh I'm overcome by this...really! nothing other than praise left for such a sensitive write.

[S. P. Vaporis]

Heartfelt to be sure...nice.

[Sam Freeland]

When I reviewed this in April, I was hardly
capable of saying how much I was overwhelmed.
The reviews that I read were also daunting.
I now have a copy printed for study and
I hope it will help me be a better writer.
So many fine writers have commented to
you with proper respect. You are the mentor
for all of us.

[Evans O Ogbebor]

Sean this is good, I like the ending, I was a bit worried to see it something very cliche for the most part, but the ending really makes up for it. it gives depth to this poem, and allows a second reading to this poem.