A Cloud in the Sky - An Excerpt from My Journal

A Cloud in the Sky - An Excerpt from My Journal

18th June, 2015

Through my long search for the meaning of life I have finally come to a conclusion. I am just a cloud in the sky, like so many others which are shaped up by the nature for an insignificantly brief moment in time out of all it's vastness. Suspended to pass it's short tenor, it is torn apart by the very nature that created it to make room for others to be formed and drifted apart again. Infinite number of them came in to being and vanished, a few of them raged and made the sounds of thunder. Even fewer turned into rain in the hope that their conversion may bring a change in a positive sense as a tribute and gratitude to the very nature that created them. Without expectations of any reward after going out of earthly existence, without any higher purpose and without any superstition, the motivation of purpose I guess is just out of the sheer joy and pleasure of being of use during the existence.

Thus, my purpose is to serve to the best of my capacity for the time I am ordained on this beautiful planet. A survivor of the linage of hundreds of thousands of befitting descendants through many hundreds of millions of years of evolution, I am going to honor my existence by putting in use all the majestic faculties I am given by nature and the distinctive strengths I am given by nurture. And further to keep on polishing them through loving, idealizing and learning from the able fellow beings that surrounds me. The genetic coding that has made what is me, I am going to blossom the sequence of altruistic capacity in it  by believing that I can and absorbing and rendering the support that surrounds me. I am going to enjoy every moment of the time the nature has crafted me in for. The tears in my eyes this moment are of the joy of finding the answer, the beginning of the rain the spills of which I hope never dries out.

Author's Note

Though I have been writing a paragraph or less in my journal whenever I get time during the busy day, this is my first writing the message in which is complete and is worth sharing.

I request all the experienced writers in here to give feedback as your feedback will help seed in other ideas and ways of writing I can adopt.

Reviews

[Confuser]

Imran: Reading your story was very enjoyable, thought provoking and insightful: I will say, you have requested experienced writers, which I am not, but I can give it my thoughts. You are very talented and I urge you to continue. The tone, was somber, the realization of how small we all are in this universe is very true. The title fits the story wonderfully; it's a very honest motivational writing full of wisdom. The metaphoric use is nature provides beautiful imagery, and made me think about life's purpose, which is to do our best and help others in this world. It is sad, but at the same time, the conclusions in your writing, especially all the reference to nature are beautiful. I hope that you will continue to write. Just gorgeous and I thank you. Dale

[Tam Warink]

Well, hmm.... you asked for a review and here it is. I address it on two levels; qualitative and technical.

I am always impressed when I detect what I believe to be someone for whom English is not their native language and that demonstrates an innate grasp of the subtleties of expression that are possible. Qualitatively you have used a pleasing and complementary set of words to express a refined contemplation with a good degree of eloquence. Kudos for that and the composition.

Technically there are a few blemishes in grammar but of those you are already probably aware. Since it's "poetry" and free-form journal entries we'll let it go without further commentary.

All in all, some very nice thoughts, nicely written.

100 significant clouds

[Basu Gupta]

Thoughtful write with excellent symbolism..
Never thought of relating myself with a cloud in the sky.
Serene and beautiful and lovely message,positive approach encouraged..
Thank You for mailing.
Worth reading.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

well this is awesome!!!
perfect comparison........
profound and thoughtful.........
makes one feel good........which is great!!!
i loved it!!!
:)