These cuts won't mend, goodbye my friend

That's not based on reality, fortunately all of my friends are safe and in perfect health :) Just got inspired (read author's note)

These cuts won't mend,

goodbye my friend,

rest in peace,

ignore my tears.

I won't forget you

or the times i told you:

"brothers are forever",

I'll see you in heaven.

We were closer than twins,

never playing in opponent teams,

my mind, you loved reading,

I got so used, i stopped speaking.

A part of me is gone

there's nothing that can be done,

a river of tears i cried for you,

i wish i had died instead of you.

Author's Note

I was reading my read requests and, i don't know even why, i read two of the titles i had (and still have) to read together (These cuts won't mend / Goodbye my friend) and i found out they actually fit very well together, they gave me a lot of ideas, so i let them inspire me and i wrote this poem, what do you think about it?

Reviews

[Gomer LePoet]

A good piece that I see is beginning to take you on a journey that lets your heart do the speaking. I would however, give some thought to what BLBrown below has offered. Flow is always important no matter what method of writing you use.
have a great day Dom. Salute' :)

[Talismanic]

there's nothing better than being intuitive and just letting the ideas take you. Touching and sophisticated first lines, yes they fit well, and i particularly felt sorrow at 'ignore my tears,' because when we are seperated from someone, we are torn between our pain and wishing we can be strong for that person. Glad to hear that everyone's well in reality, but still a write of the very purest and deepest emotion-:)

[Chip]

Sad. But good poem. I feel for you.

[Emrick]

its cool.i remember my english teacher once told me that a good poet/writer or artist gets an idea from nowhere.He/she never struggles thinkin of what to write about.if there's nothin on his/her mind he/she just keeps calm.
this poem reminds me of my favourite Robert kelly song "i wish".

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Great experiment, pain and depression bleeds through the lines. Nicely done.

[afra]

good work i relate a lot with this poem ...keep writing.....^-^