Riddle H

Riddle H

A Poem by 外人 (Gaijin)
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Opinions and answers are welcome :)

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I'm no bigger than your fist,
I fly from side to side with no direction,
my insane journey is not my intention,
they hit me, and force me, and i can't do otherwise,
every drop of sweat makes my hopes of stopping arise
but my cruel enemies won't give me up that easily,
with their scaring weapons they will hit me badly,
because of them i cry in sorrow,
they make me afraid of not coming to tomorrow,
my pain, hiding with savage roars they try,
not a single tear i see in their eye,
such an endless time i spend in that net-split field
untill the final score is revealed,
'till the next game i'm free to rest,
guess my name and pass my test !

© 2012 外人 (Gaijin)


Author's Note

外人 (Gaijin)
Hope you liked it !
Used Chaucer rhyme scheme (ABBCCDD etc ...),
The answer is ... Tennis ball.

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My guess was sport. Good riddle. I can see the answer now in this riddle. lol

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

For some reason I thought the answer was heart! x

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good description in the poem. I believe a tennis ball. Side to side. Could be a soccer ball? Thank you for sharing your entertaining poetry and thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

its a type of ball baseball, softball, or volleyball?


Posted 12 Years Ago


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Wow, a very interesting perspective on the way a tennis ball may feel. Nice personification. I was originatly baseball until you said a net-split feild. You stuck to a rhyme scheme as well adding flair to the riddle. Nice job

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Another good, funny poem from Dominic. May I just suggest one small change - breezily might be the better rhyme in line 7.Good one !

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is great! A very good challenge. Very original. Well done. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

In my mind I was guessing volleyball :) Ahaha. A great riddle though!!





Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nicely done. perhaps it is a volleyball?

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm guessing sport???? I don't do sport... this ones hard.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Added on June 13, 2012
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