Dolce sonno, amara realtà (translation below)

Came out with the idea waking up to go to school, developed it when i came back home :)

Dolce sonno,

amara realtà

che distruggi

grattacieli notturni

e rendez-vous fra innamorati

segretamente rincontrati.

Dolce sonno,

amara realtà,

a volte cosi opprimente

da scoraggiare il sognatore più delirante,

a volte cosi premurosa,

da impedirci un volo destinato a una caduta rovinosa.

Amara realtà,

dolce sonno,

avvolgimi, Morfeo, nel tuo incantesimo,

cosi benevolo all'uomo

e cosi inaspettato all'arrivo

ma dall'esito cosi suggestivo. 

Amara realtà,

dolce sonno

che dissolvi i miei problemi

in fumo soffiato lontano dai venti,

e non mi neghi un solo desiderio

finché non mi sveglio dal tuo sogno illusorio.

Dolce sonno,

amara realtà,

siete due facce della stessa medaglia,

e per noi, vi date battaglia,

amara realtà,

dolce sonno.

Translation

Title: Sweet sleep, bitter reality

Sweet sleep,

bitter reality

that destroys

nocturne skyscrappers

and rendez-vous of lovers

secretly reunited.

Sweet sleep,

bitter reality,

sometimes so oppressive

to discourage the best dreamer

sometimes so caring

to forbid us a fly fated to finish in an awful fall.

Bitter reality,

sweet sleep,

Morpheus, send me your spell,

so benevolent to the humankind

and so unexpected to arrive

but with such a suggestive outcome.

Bitter reality,

sweet sleep

that shade my problems

in smoke carried far away by the wind,

you don't deny me a single wish

until i wake from your illusory dream.

Sweet sleep,

bitter reality,

you are two parts of the same medal

fighting for us,

bitter reality,

sweet sleep.

Author's Note

Waiting for your opinions about it :)
The rhyme scheme is ABCCDD ABEEFF etc ...
PS: Translation sucks, i used google translate for a lot of words (my lexic in Italian is way wider than in English)

Reviews

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I like your rhyme scheme and flow of the poem. It goes very well! Also, it's actually pretty neat how you post two different languages on most of your work. Even though I can't read the Italian, it's still awesome to see. But what's better is you translate it for us, readers. Some writers don't do that so thumbs up for you! ;D
Again, nice job.

Ashley Rivers-- your friend ;)

[afra]

awwww nice write ....keep it up

[To be scene To be heard..]

one of my favorites of your writes

[eglantine]

This right here is the golden ticket! Your best work yet :)

[MandaBear]

wow this is awesome love it!!!!

[Who Cares]

Very nice, The repetition adds power to your words, it gets the point across. Then you switch the order. You have a nice rhyme scheme throughout. You have some real talent. Also your vocabulary use is nice. Diction is a big part in writing and you ise it well. I love how you have two languages it adds a nice touch.

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Beautiful! I love how you use rhyme schemes continuously with such great quality. It's tough to write poems that way, and you did a great job here.

Keep it up!

[CourtneyShay]

wow this is awesome love it i love how you write in a different language and then you translate it

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. I like to see the poetry in the original language and translation. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Leslie Philibert]

I really admire writers who use different languages, not too many have managed it,maybe Samuel Beckett in French or Joseph Conrad in English, so first of all before I even read the poem, well done.
O.K, the English version is fine, maybe the repeats are a bit tiresome, but you probably wanted a good translation, and the fly fated to finish line has too much alliteration.
All in all a good piece of writing, might need a bit of work, but you are a young poet with a lot of talent, good write.