She's my girl and she's still yet to come

Thinking about my dream girl

No blonde hair nor deep blue eyes she does have,

perfect shape she doesn't need or crave,

but her voice is so soft it speaks right to my heart,

she's my girl and she's still yet to come.

She listen to everything i say,

i make her feel special everyday,

the world plays on FM but we, alone, play on AM,

she's my girl and she's still yet to come.

She's smart and she's not ashamed of it,

she knows much more than other girls, she's wit;

she doesn't hide herself behind make-up,

she's my girl and she's still yet to come.

She cheers me up whenever I'm sad,

with her i can't ever be mad,

i make her feel safe whenever she's scared,

she's my girl and she's still yet to come.

She's my soul mate, my baby, my it girl ...

she's my girl and she's still yet to come.

Author's Note

Well, that was an experiment, today my english teacher taught me about VISUAL RHYME (something i've never met in Italian since every letter sounds always the same way in italian) and i tried to compose something using them. The anaphora of "she" was made both to continue the visual effect started from the visual rhyme and to resume the theme of the poem. So tell me what you think about it (HONESTLY !!)

Reviews

[Nona]

HONESTLY -- this is the most touching peice I have come across recently! It is so innocent and tender! So naive and childish and romantic! I keep smiling when I read this! Also it reads like a song -- serenade of a medieval knight (with this repetition of the last line in each stanza) I totally loved it! Congrats!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Honestly, this is good. It shows your dreams about your dream girl the yearning for her. A sweet write.

[Buniheart]

A really nice, sweet poem. I do like the rhyme, very concise and precise, and your bravery in trying this type of poetry out, really worked well. Nice work :)

[Cancelled]

Really nice! :)
-RutT

[BatFan38]

this reminds me of that one song. I dont remember the words buts like "I still havent met her yet" is the only line I remember. I think this is great

[T. Michele Smock]

i love it domicic_995

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts and I like the desire to make the girl your own and only. Few people make us smile and happy. Need to hold them close and keep them as good friends. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[MandaBear]

i love it :P and very well done on trying something new lol this sounds just like me perfect!! hahaha just kidding. great write :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

great outsome then, well done with trying something new, well done, good read.