Misplaced

Just a little poem I've written setting my mind totally free (didn't care about anything so you won't find rhymes, and things like that, just pure soul)

Misplaced, like a fish outside water,

like a polar bear in the tropics,

like an alien on Earth ...

like me in this country.

I don't belong to this place,

my mind has already understood it,

in fact, she flies away and 

she pity me because i can't follow.

My heart has many nationalities,

but none of them is where i stand,

i feel trapped ... i want to escape ... but i can't,

my dreamland is far away and i don't know the path to it.

I'm just a soldier, surviving in the enemy land,

who's forgotten where he comes from and crave for his unknown native land.

Reviews

[Nona]

I can easily connect to this one on the emotional level, and the absence of rhymes does not bother at all - on the contrary it adds more drama and passion to this write! well... if you are a half Brazilian then totally you feel strange anywhere in the world. I am dreaming soooooooooooo much to go to Rio - it is my most exciting dream ever and it will come true one day! :))

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I really like the comparisons in this poem, especially like that first stanza. Good self feelings shown too. Nice write.

[kidd x]

Wow i like your last stanza so much, it has so much deepness to it.

[Stephanie]

Now this, I can easily relate to. I can't remember all the houses I've lived in with moving around so often. I do find myself in a little box sometimes of where I think I should stand but at the end of the day have no idea who I am. Anyway, I am a glad I took the time to read this. Very well written. Très Bien!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Quite complex for something so short, a well written piece, well done, good read.

[T. Michele Smock]

nice work amanda

[MandaBear]

awww that's awesome :) keep up the great work