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How much i envy that glass,
So luckly blessed by her fingers' touch,
Enjoy, greedy glass, in your short life
What my senses can barely dream.

How much i envy that singer
For getting her attention so easily,
Conquering her look at every song,
Anything i'd do for much less.

Play, music, play eternally
And let her steps, her graceful body,
Outstage your syncopated rhythm,
One day i shall forget you but she

Shall rule forever my memories,
Light forever my desire,
Warm forever my heart
Remember me i once loved a goddess.

Author's Note

Written this (don't know if i should call it poetry, i couldn't write rhymes, i tried so hard but i failed, guess i lost the gift of writing rhymes) for a wonderful girl i met at a show in Rio de janeiro, i simply fell in love with her ... For the way she dances.

Reviews

[Vidya Bacchus]

This speaks of such sweet feelings.I hope you got the girl.This was very nice:)

[Bowers]

this piece was absolutely beautiful, I loved it! you portrayed such emotion so vividly, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece!

[Great Aunt Astri]

Oh, how lovely. I like the way you lead the second last verse into the last verse. You talk about 'forever' and the flow between verses reflects this!

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thank you very much, i appreciate your feedback :)

[Cole Hayley]

Third stanza rocks. The whole poem does as well. Great job.

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thank you very much

[Mockingbird]

a stunning poem. i find that great poems don't rhyme at all, it becomes more personal and intimate. an excellent way of writing. great job.

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. I like how you used strong description to give life and vision to your goddess. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Leslie Philibert]

A poet I know well, one who never fails to delight ; this is great, South American passion fused with European literature ; well written; a great way to start a Sunday morning for me !

[外人 (Gaijin)]

South American passion fused with European literature? =D Thank you, thank you, thank you :) you make me feel so happy :)

[Inda]

This is really good! You captured a moment perfectly and that isn't easy to do. Great job!

[Akashi]

Beautifully written, thank you for sharing.

[redflutterby]

Sweet and wistful...I truly felt your love for the goddess in each line! Wonderful poem.