F. (translation below)

Hope you like it :)

Rivivo l'essenza di noi

in questo timido scambio di sguardi

mentre le nostre anime tristemente sole, 

felicemente si rincontrano

e ballano,

ballano le note immortali del nostro amore.

Sento sulla mia pelle il tuo soave tocco

cosi crudelmente allontanato dai miei sensi

per più inverni di quanti ne voglia ricordare.

Risvegli in me una passione mai dimenticata,

intensa, devota, profonda e metafisica

che trascende i limiti dei nostri corpi imperfetti.

E ora ascolto i tuoi lunghi silenzi

e non li cambierei per un coro di angeli !

Le stelle tutte illuminano il tuo volto mentre

la candida notte si colora del tuo innocente profumo

e sussurra ai miei ricordi il tuo nome:

F.

TRANSLATION:

I live again the essence of us

in this shy trade of looks

while our souls sadly alone

happily find each other

and dance,

dance the everlasting notes of our love.

I feel on my skin your sweet touch

so meanly took away from my senses

for more winters than the ones I want to remember.

You wake within me a passion I've never forgotten:

intense, devoted, deep and metaphysical

that transcends boundaries of our imperfect bodies.

And now I listen to your long silences

and I wouldn't trade them for an angels choir !

All the stars light up your face while

the pure night is coloured by your innocent perfume

and whispers to my memories your name:

F.

Author's Note

Written about my very first love. We met again after ages and I ended up writing this.
Probably my translation sucks so I apologize :(

Reviews

[Writer #00]

Great emotional imagery (imagery of your emotions). Unexpected encounters that link us to our past once more must be extremely inspirational, I'm glad you shared this with us. I love the line "and now I listen to your long silences/and I wouldn't trade them for an angels choir !"

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thx :) glad u liked it !

[Thea]

That was really beautiful. The flow was seamless. You used a very effective form of imagery here and it struck me while reading each line. Great work. Keep it up. ^^

P.S. I probably reviewed this so late. I'm sorry.

[Inda]

You captured those butterfly in the stomach feelings perfectly and the imagery is fantastic and of course the fact that you don't say the name at the end is brilliant!

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thank you =D i really appreciated your review :)))

[Cole Hayley]

I realy love it, its sweet and somewhat quirky.. but great.

[TC Dunn]

Bella poesia. La traduzione e buona.

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Grazie mille ! Sei italiano/a?

[TC Dunn]

Prego. No, ho abitato in Svizzera...la citta di Lugano.

[TL Boehm]

And now I listen to your long silences
and I wouldn't trade them for an angels choir !

this is romantic and beautiful - elegant writing!

[.]

As always I loved it! It's Italian isn't it? :) 100/100

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thx :) and yes :)

[.]

no prob! tnx! :D

[Krista Weiss]

Awww! Such a sweet poem!! I loved it!!!

[Leslie Philibert]

A writer I have always liked. I don`t know if it is translated well, but the English version is fine ( maybe, meanly taken away would be better, but that`s all I found) and loads and loads of fine images...a cracker, well done !

[Alex Falkner]

I liked this, (I'm sure it would sound far better in itallian)
I think it's well written and very sweet.

Tammy.