Piove di giorno (translation below)

Just a little haiku I came up with ... guess where ! At school :(

Piove di giorno:

tristemente asciutto

sono a scuola.

TRANSLATION: It rains on day-time

It rains during daytime:

Unhappily dry

I am at school.

Reviews

[Mockingbird]

i can picture you staring at the rain outside, and though you are dry, you are hating school. great way to express yourself.

[Leslie Philibert]

Great !, an excellent poem. Laura is right, put daytime together.
(Maybe.. it rains day over ?)

[Laura Maidah]

"one" day-time.

The first line is awkward grammatically. Daytime is one word btw.

Great last two lines. Beautiful and succinct. Great poem IMHO.

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thanks =D Going to correct it right now, thanks again ! =D

[MandaBear]

That is exactly how I feel about school. Great write I really liked all of it.

[quinfinn]

i really like the line "unhappily dry" it says so much with only two simple words. this is a very clever and engaging piece!

[外人 (Gaijin)]

thank you very much ! I could not decide whether to publish this haiku or not, thought it was so not worth it, then I decided to let my readers judge it :)