Phones (translation below)

Just something I came up with, hope you like it ;)

Phones no' ouvido' e tudo p'ra 'tras,

assim eu busco a minha paz,

neste mundo maluco de almas sem leticia,

a musica è minha unica amiga,

entao fecho os olhos e escuto 'minha musica.

Rodiado por mascaras sem cara,

es uma cara sem mascara,

que descreve o que sinto melhor que qualquer idioma,

compartilhando comigo o teu sonoro aroma,

entao fecho os olhos e escuto 'minha musica.

Nota apos nota, minha mente voa longe deste lugar

a procura de um lar onde vale a pena estar,

entre sonhos, pensamento e imaginaçao,

carrega minha mente, abraça o meu coraçao,

entao fecho os olhos e escuto 'minha musica.

Fecho os olhos e escuto 'minha musica ...

calmo agora os levanto,

nao vejo ninguem, somente o meu pensamento.

TRANSLATION

Title: Headphones

Headphones on my ears, everything (left) behind,

that's the way I look for peace,

in this crazy world of souls without happiness,

music is my only friend,

so I close my eyes and listen to my music.

Surrounded by face-less masks,

you are a mask-less face

who describes what I feel better than any language,

sharing with me your sonorous aroma,

so I close my eyes and listen to my music.

Note after note, my mind flies away from this place

to look for a place where it's worth to be,

among dreams, thoughts and imagination,

you bring my mind, hug my heart,

so I close my eyes and listen to my music.

I close my eyes and listen to my music ...

calm, now I re-open them,

I don't see anyone, just my thoughts.

Author's Note

For Portuguese-speaking WC's members, if I made any mistake, don't hesitate to tell me, I'm Brazilian but I'm not so used to write in port :)

Reviews

[quinfinn]

a sad statement about Americans when most of us can speak only one language...
i love this write but i hate headphones unless i'm sitting in my chair alone...otherwise i'm constantly thinking about what is going on that i can't hear, you know, approaching people or cars, axe murderers etc....

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Sorry, didn't mean to hurt anyone with the author's note :( I'm sure everyone can learn as many languages as they want if they try !! (I want to learn at least 5 more ones), relax, man !! No axe murderer will come after you, listen to your music in peace ;)

[quinfinn]

Americans are fat and lazy...especially the new generation. and there are dozens of teenaged axe murderers looking to get free headphones

[eglantine]

bwhahahaha quinfinn--you're hilarious. but also i bet it's prob a bit true.... silly teenagers

[Crazy Cat Man]

What the hell are u talking about quinfinn? Why are u talking about fat and lazy Americans? That has nothing to do with this poem. Why are u talking about axe murderers in a poem about music and headphones? U got issues sir.

[quinfinn]

apparently, sir, you have the issues...i was attempting humor and you just didn't get it. and...in the metaphorical sense americans ARE fat and lazy and the axe murderer thing was a metaphor for the violence in american society or are you the only one who had to have that spelled out for them?if you are going to come at me with thoughtless rhetoric, come well armed

[Crazy Cat Man]

I dont think u even read the poem. U just babbled on instead on nonsense.

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Guys, guys, calm down ! There's no reason to get mad at each other ;)

[quinfinn]

as you see it, perhaps. would it appease your sense of having been wronged if i told you that i not only read the poem, more than once, understood and embraced it as well (having been a professional musician for many years) and just didn't feel the need to trivialize a great write with inane bantering? can we now kindly dispense with the puzzled queries and damaged psyches? pretty please with whatever your favorite topping is?

[eglantine]

oooo tension lol

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thanks for the complimets on my poem !! =D

[quinfinn]

i know that you know that i loved the poem. where in the world did cat guy get the idea that i was attacking you or your art? people on this site who DO know me also know that i often infuse my critiques with some personal humor to make the reviewing process more relaxed. of course it is a great write! that one came out of left field like a slow bullet and it insulted me. sorry you had to be witness to such insignificant trivialities, but....think of all the attention your poem is receiving because of it!! so cool

[Crazy Cat Man]

It shows you're not very good at humor.

[eglantine]

not to be the peanut gallery, and i highly respect you both as people and as fellow poets, but I have to admit that I found it funny... idk what that makes me but just thought i'd say.

[MandaBear]

Very nice writing

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to talk to anyone. Those earphones are on everyone today. Even the old folks. A interesting poem.
Coyote

[Mockingbird]

it's good you've found solace in music.

[Crazy Cat Man]

Lol i never a beautiful poem about headphones lol u made it sound romantic. Great piece very unique and creative.

[Leslie Philibert]

Like the poem, don`t like headphones much, love music. Good job, really admire writers who use several languages.

[eglantine]

oooo sonorous! great use of that word.

[MOON]

Music soothes the soul , lovely write.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Very nice, I really enjoyed this a lot. I love the feeling of being tuned into music and only music. Having it as a friend. Music speaks so much, and you spoke about music well in this poem of yours. Really enjoyed it all. :) Wonderful write.

[Damien Davison]

Very nice writing about your passion for music, I connect with that being an aspiring musician. Good job.