Never been kissed

Well, just wanna tell there's no hyperbole, it's all true :) Hope you like it !

Never 'been kissed,

never, by woman's lips, I've been touched,

never, my lips've been sealed by true passion,

never 'experienced such a natural sensation.

Always 'wanted to wait for my soul mate,

always, to share this moment on a magical date,

always, proud to say I'll be: "she's the only one I kissed",

always, her beautiful and adorable lips I've dreamed.

When we meet, we'll share an endless kiss,

when we meet, no doubts I have I will love her,

when we meet, she'll be mine and I'll be hers,

when we meet, the sea and the summer moon will be her maids,

and everlasting love I'll promise her with a kiss, when we meet.

Author's Note

Tried to write a chanson, if Charles D'Orleans made it right, it should be something like 3 stanzas: quatrain - quatrain - 5 verses-stanza.

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Okay where to start. First off, I love this. :) Enjoyed the innocence and honesty, the sweetness and romance in this poem. The details especially in the last stanza are really quite nice.
"when we meet, the sea and the summer moon will be her maids"
Sometimes the person you have the first kiss with isn't going to be the true love, and sometimes the person that you do have your first kiss is the true love because it works out and saving the kiss was worth it. Waiting for that one special someone, the true love, the soul mate, does take love and patience. A kiss is so special if shared with that right one. Very nice write, thank you for sharing and posting. Enjoyed reading this lovely and sweet poem. Hope you find your true love who is someone special to share that kiss with. :)

[quinfinn]

technicalities...i care not... well written feeling ...now that's another story. you have spun a web of romance, beautiful and exclusive...and that truly sings!

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thank you very much =D

[quinfinn]

by your leave.... welcome

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, admire the way you work at different poetical forms, you show artistic discipline in your work, and are really interested in literature.

[Tonelli]

Good job!! Very emotional but short. Precise structure.

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Obrigado :)

[MandaBear]

Such a sweet poem! I like the new style of writing its awesome! Very Romantic and was this the poem you didn't want to publish? If so I am glad you decided to do it. I loved it. Makes me wish I was the poem lol or at least the person that could write it. But better leave this awesome poem to the professional! Great write:)

[外人 (Gaijin)]

thank you !! =D Professional? I shivered ahahah, well, actually no, the poem I'm afraid to post is something so intimate I wouldn't show even to my very best friend, it will die with me xD

[MandaBear]

Your welcome :)

[Laura Maidah]

very sweet. glad you didn't write this in port

[外人 (Gaijin)]

ahahah, I would have put the translation below xD

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

A quite successful chanson, I would say! The language is light and lovely. I enjoyed reading it, good job. :-)

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Beautiful work. The structure is precisely executed, and your use of anaphora really emphasizes the purpose of your poem. Great job.

[~FALL3N-ANG3L~]

This is just.. I'm speechless, its beautiful. I can't find one thing to criticize or give advice on. I usually can but, I can't find one thing I'd want you to do differently. Its beautiful hun, I have to say it again haha. I loved it, excellent just excellent work. I can't bring myself to write in any kind of restricted writing. But, to see this it makes me want to try (Though I know it'll be horrifying haha). Just amazing job hun, keep up the great work!

[The Refined Poet]

this really is poetry in motion... beautiful, evoking emotions of timeless and true love. excellent write.