An ancient love story

Inspired by a Brazilian soap opera (Gabriela, a soap opera that takes place in the '20s), decided to write about love stories the way they used to be ... how I wish I could live one of them :(

Bring me back to the time when for my fair true love,

I'd recite my love poems,

fearless, to her parents I'd

ask permission to court her, yes I hope they'd say.

Bring me back to the time when for my happiness,

I'd walk her through the city

hand by hand, under the moon

I'd dare to ask her a kiss and true love we'd share.

Bring me back to the time when for my fair true love,

enormous respect I'd have,

her body'd be a temple,

unavailable 'till God gives us its blessing.

Bring me back to the time when for my happiness,

I'd make it all official,

on my knees I'd ask her to

be mine, with the most beautiful engagement ring.

Author's Note

I decided to focus on metrica this time, no rhymes, this time I focused only on creating 12-7-7-12 syllables stanzas. Love or hate it?

Reviews

[~FALL3N-ANG3L~]

I liked it, it brings back the simpler times where men had honor an loyalty. Also, it seemed very mature for a teenager. An being a teenager myself, I gotta say. Very good job hun. I hope to hear more poetry from you, an would like a review of some of my own poetry.

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thank you very much for your compliments, your review was very appreciated :) Though, I have more than 200 RRs still to do, don't worry, I will definitely find some time to read some poetries of yours =D

[~FALL3N-ANG3L~]

Your welcome, an thank you. (: Have a good day now.

[Anjali]

So sweet and beautiful! It's amazing! You showed what true love is to you and it turned out so good, your words are really mature and I really enjoyed reading this!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Love this. Oh the beauty of the old fashioned ways. Wonderfully captured.

[TL Boehm]

this is a nice change up. Well constructed and thoughtful prose poetry

[外人 (Gaijin)]

This is written in verses, they just don't rhyme,
I've focused on the metrica (12-6-6-12 each stanza)

[Tate Morgan]

Every girl and every father wants this in their life.A respectful son in law and a loving husband

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thx =D

[SUGATA M]

You wrote an universal love story. Ancient is a relative word.

[Aly Jones]

It's so beautiful. :)

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

This is lovely poetry. I like the story it tells, and how you expressed it. Great job. :-)

[Eloha]

This is fabulous stuff, I like your attention to syllable use and the clasical feel to it, it reminds me somehow of Petrarch.

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Oh Gosh ! That's the greatest compliment you could possibly give me ! Telling me I remember you one of the fathers of Italian literature and language (I'm Italian), thank you very, VERY much !

[Laura Maidah]

THis is like a love poem. So similar