Mare (translation below)

Been to Copacabana beach, in Rio de janeiro, today and the most beautiful sea I've ever seen inspired me this :) I dedicate this poem to a friend of mine, Lumière déclinante.

Mare, mondo di Poseidone, 

pittore dal deciso tocco,

di un'opera d'arte fece il suo posto,

imponente quanto il suo nome.

Mare, regno di Nettuno,

dio benevolo e generoso,

con ogni tua creatura nutri l'uomo,

mai in terra ferma ci fu essere più virtuoso. 

Mare, dimora di Aegir,

padre delle muse degli esploratori,

amiche dei surfisti, nemiche dei navigatori,

infondete calma a chi da lontano vi riesce ad udir'.

Mare, casa di Yemanja,

signora delle acque di ogni porto;

ti chiedo il permesso di entrare nella tua casa

mentre varco la soglia, per non renderti torto.

TRANSLATION

Title: Sea

Sea, world of Poseidon,

painter of a still touch,

an art piece he made its place,

awesome as his name.

Sea, kingdom of Neptune,

benevolent and kind God,

with every creature of yours you feed the men,

never on earth there was a more virtuous being.

Sea, house of Aegir,

father of the explorers' muses,

friends of the surfists, enimies of the seafarers,

you infuse calm in people that from faraway can hear you.

Sea, home of Yemanja,

lady of every port's waters;

I ask you the permission of getting in your home,

for not disrespecting you, while I walk in.

Author's Note

Ok, so the deal was that: I decided to collect in a single poem all the entities I know (from different mythologies, respectively: Greek, Roman, Viking and African-Brazilian) linked to the sea. Also I tried to write a sonnet but since I started with Petrarchian sonnet scheme but continued with Shakespearean's (got distracted), I decided to mix both, creating something different, if you check stanzas #1 and 3 follows Petrachian sonnet's scheme (ABBA) and stanzas #2 and 4 Shakespearian's (ABAB).

Reviews

[Laura Maidah]

This was interesting to read. It is not unique or different than anything else I'ver read called "sea". It was successful in being a good poem about the gods and the sea. One of your better stuff. Have you listened to Taylor Swift's new song about never ever ever ever getting back together? You should write her a letter. She might like your picture. This one is very cute and you look charismatic.

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thank you very much for your compliments :) Yeah, I've heard it, believe it or not, I've first listened to a cover of it than the original ! lol. Thank you very much for the compliments about my pic, btw, what's Taylor's email address? xD

[Mockingbird]

the ending makes it sound like a prayer. it is very nostalgic and educational.

[eglantine]

"you infuse calm in people that from faraway can hear you." beautiful line, best of the poem, in my opninion. I am def one of those people

[Leslie Philibert]

Liked this a lot. I got a bit confused with the author`s note, until I understood you are talking about the rhyme scheme of the Italian original. I myself don`t work with rhymes or syllables, I write in free verse all the time, I think all the rules concerning iambs or trochees or verse forms like Whitneys should be descriptive not prescriptive, but that`s my personal view that a lot of people don`t share.
Anyway, enough of my waffle, I think this is an excellent poem, written with a lot of care, enjoyed the use of a classical background, the reader notes you spent a lot of time ( well invested ) in this poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. I like the story of old and the strong ending.
"I ask you the permission of getting in your home,
for not disrespecting you, while I walk in."
Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. Wood ?]

your description confuses me but the poem is great. You excelled yourself here i think

[Krista Weiss]

Really good and really beautiful!! Good job :) < 3

[afra]

simply beautiful ...well done