Julie (translation below)

A little Parisian love story that came to my mind, hope you like it :)

Tienimi la mano

e portami lontano,

in questa magica notte parigina

mentre la pioggia ci baccia

col suo umido tocco 

dolcemente, mi porti nell'ile de cité,

mi mostri il meglio di Parigi e di te,

sdraiati, i tuoi capelli si posano sul mio collo,

sensazione magnifica di pienezza, mai più saro 

solo un nome nel mio cuore è scritto,

melodia di rose rosse per chi l'ha sentito,

appena il tatto, l'udito puo sopraffare,

col bacio appassionato di chi mi dice di amare.

E tu, Parigi, sii testimone 

di questo giuramento di eterno amore.

Il y a une chouse que je ne t'ai jamais dite:

avec tout mon coeur, je t'aime, Julie.

TRANSLATION

Title: Julie

Take my hand

and bring me far away,

in this magic parisian night

while rain kisses us

with its wet touch

sweetly, you bring me to Ile de cité,

you show me the best of Paris and of you,

lying down, your hair sit on my neck,

great sensation of fullness, I'll never be again 

Alone/only one name is written in my heart

red roses melody for the ones who heard it,

only touch can overwhelm hearing,

with the passionate kiss of the one that tells me she love me.

And you, Paris, be witness

of this oarth of everlasting love.

Il y a une chouse que je ne t'ai jamais dite:

avec tout mon coeur, je t'aime, Julie.

The last two verses are in French, they mean:

"There's a thing I've never told you:

with all my heart, I love you, Julie".

Author's Note

Ok, so there are two enjambements (you have to read them as linked to the verse where they are AND the verse that came before, you'll get two different meanings this way, that's the point), the first is "sweetly" at the beginning of the second stanza, and "alone/only" at the beginning of the third, it has a / because in Italian the word "solo" means both of the words but in English I had to use the two words to make the enjembement make sense :(

Reviews

[~FALL3N-ANG3L~]

Its very sweet an romantic. I, myself being French much enjoyed reading it in a different language. It's quite well written. An I look forward to reading more work from you. Excellent job with the translation also. Aussi, j'espere que vous ecrivez plus de poesie en francais.

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thank you, thank you, thank you ! A compliment on my translation from a French native speaker really makes me so happy !! =D Yeah, I will definitely try, but my French is not as good as my English, sadly :( But I'm working on it, I'm reading a lot of books in French !

[~FALL3N-ANG3L~]

Well, that's good to hear. An your welcome, your welcome haha. Practice makes prefect, just keep trying an you'll get the hang of it.

[afra]

awwwwwwwwww ..so sweet ...good job

[eglantine]

"with its wet touch" rain is wet... so that is kind of redundant? Instead of a textile adjective, use an auditory one? Combine the senses--synesthesia!!!

[外人 (Gaijin)]

In italian it looked better, "umido" in fact doesn't mean exactly "wet" in the sense of something touched by water but simply the "sensation of being wet", I don't know, like a "giorno umido"(=wet day), it's not like you're under water but you feel the sensation of being wet

[eglantine]

sighs, and therein lies the sadness of translation... you lose the depth of pureness

[外人 (Gaijin)]

:( unfortunately you're right, in this case even more, because I had no clue how to explain you what "Umido" means xD
For the translation I used the closer word, "wet" literally is not "umido" but "bagnato"

[eglantine]

wel lthanks for explaining :)

[dukovan]

I agree synesthesia gets the people going.

[emman]

Hello Dominic!how are you? I was just busy on my work..

Its nice to read poems again..and now I'm back to read it all and give my reviews :)

This poem is wonderful..very interesting..regardless of the non-english words,,the totality is great!nice!

:)

[MandaBear]

the poem is very pretty. I enjoyed it.

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Excellent poem. I enjoyed it :)

[Mockingbird]

i like how you mixed italian (?) with french. you are talented in being a polyglot. the poem is very pretty.

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thank you very much ! Yep, the first part is in Italian :)