Julie (translation below)

A little Parisian love story that came to my mind, hope you like it :)

Tienimi la mano

e portami lontano,

in questa magica notte parigina

mentre la pioggia ci baccia

col suo umido tocco 

dolcemente, mi porti nell'ile de cité,

mi mostri il meglio di Parigi e di te,

sdraiati, i tuoi capelli si posano sul mio collo,

sensazione magnifica di pienezza, mai più saro 

solo un nome nel mio cuore è scritto,

melodia di rose rosse per chi l'ha sentito,

appena il tatto, l'udito puo sopraffare,

col bacio appassionato di chi mi dice di amare.

E tu, Parigi, sii testimone 

di questo giuramento di eterno amore.

Il y a une chouse que je ne t'ai jamais dite:

avec tout mon coeur, je t'aime, Julie.

TRANSLATION

Title: Julie

Take my hand

and bring me far away,

in this magic parisian night

while rain kisses us

with its wet touch

sweetly, you bring me to Ile de cité,

you show me the best of Paris and of you,

lying down, your hair sit on my neck,

great sensation of fullness, I'll never be again 

Alone/only one name is written in my heart

red roses melody for the ones who heard it,

only touch can overwhelm hearing,

with the passionate kiss of the one that tells me she love me.

And you, Paris, be witness

of this oarth of everlasting love.

Il y a une chouse que je ne t'ai jamais dite:

avec tout mon coeur, je t'aime, Julie.

The last two verses are in French, they mean:

"There's a thing I've never told you:

with all my heart, I love you, Julie".

Author's Note

Ok, so there are two enjambements (you have to read them as linked to the verse where they are AND the verse that came before, you'll get two different meanings this way, that's the point), the first is "sweetly" at the beginning of the second stanza, and "alone/only" at the beginning of the third, it has a / because in Italian the word "solo" means both of the words but in English I had to use the two words to make the enjembement make sense :(

Reviews

[~FALL3N-ANG3L~]

Its very sweet an romantic. I, myself being French much enjoyed reading it in a different language. It's quite well written. An I look forward to reading more work from you. Excellent job with the translation also. Aussi, j'espere que vous ecrivez plus de poesie en francais.

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thank you, thank you, thank you ! A compliment on my translation from a French native speaker really makes me so happy !! =D Yeah, I will definitely try, but my French is not as good as my English, sadly :( But I'm working on it, I'm reading a lot of books in French !

[~FALL3N-ANG3L~]

Well, that's good to hear. An your welcome, your welcome haha. Practice makes prefect, just keep trying an you'll get the hang of it.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice write. I enjoy how you put French in the end of the English version as well.

[TL Boehm]

this is a lovely poem. I am always impressed with those who can write in multiple languages. I can barley manage one.

[To be scene To be heard..]

amazing poem!!!

[Leslie Philibert]

Great poem, gentle and well written, about a city we all love.

[kayla]

This is beautiful. The words are very descriptive and captivating, leaving visual references in my mind. This was great, and I loved reading it.

[Dr. Wood ?]

you are a lucky man to have more than one language...It might be cheating when one of them is French and you are writing a love poem...I will have to look it up....this was very Romantic and also extremely good.

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Ahahahah, well, didn't make it on purpose, just wrote the last 2 verses in French because there's no Italian word rhyming with Julie and in French ... well, everything rhymes with it ! xD Thank you for your kind review and all the complimets, I really appreciated them :)

[Cassie Fraga]

welp first let me thank you for the translation... I think its awesome when writers pen in different languages but when they dont translate... I feel like I missed out on something great!! and second let me say WOW!!!!!!!! your writing is never a let down, you pen with such soul, and I appreciate that!!!
**tips my lyrical wand to you**

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thank you very much :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. I like when you write in two languages. Give the reader opportunity to look at new words with some understanding. Good to know love and roam the old cities. Thank you for the outstanding poem of love.
Coyote

[Krista Weiss]

Really good! I love it! :)