The Imperfect Prison
A Book by
Domenic Luciani
Trying out short chapters, hopefully that will narrow down edits.
© 2010 Domenic Luciani
Reviews
I love it! haha I think its so funny that in books and in movies the poison doesn't take effect until after the murderer says something about it.
Posted 14 Years Ago
stunning write :D
Posted 14 Years Ago
stunning write :D
Definitely an attention grabber, and I look forward to reading more. Your description is really good, too.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Definitely an attention grabber, and I look forward to reading more. Your description is really good, too.
“What!? (you are too good a writer for this. It's either a question mark or exclamation, but never both.)
Not a bad start. And it does capture the reader, which as writers that is our goal. Nice work.
Posted 14 Years Ago
“What!? (you are too good a writer for this. It's either a question mark or exclamation, but never both.)
Not a bad start. And it does capture the reader, which as writers that is our goal. Nice work.
Wow. I could picture everything that was happening, almost like a movie to tell you the truth. This is very interesting and I can't wait for the next chapter.
Keep up the good work!
Posted 14 Years Ago
Wow. I could picture everything that was happening, almost like a movie to tell you the truth. This is very interesting and I can't wait for the next chapter.
Keep up the good work!
Interesting. Nice description. Good to use of third person.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Interesting. Nice description. Good to use of third person.
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Added on April 24, 2010
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Domenic Luciani Buffalo, NY
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That is my real name, and that is really me in the picture. Like Patrick says, I'm not in the witness protection program.
I mostly write books and stories. I like fantasy, or fiction, but if..
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