this story is the very first version. it is raw,
unspellchecked, unedited, straight-from-my-
brain-to-the-page first draft, and as such is
likely to contain typos, spellos, the occasional
idiot logic leap, plot crash, and/or stupid
digression. but please enjoy.
My Review
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I admire your bravery for posting your story raw. I find it best to write roughly and and then later going back and editing. I think the story is very interesting and I'm always ready to read a new adventure.
Okay, first off let me say that I am completely and utterly enraptured and captivated with you right now for the simple fact that you even know what Greek mythology is. Two gold stars and a delicious (virtual) pie for you.
Second, your writing is very detailed. It was great how you were able to stick to the myth without being bound. As of right now, you're my favorite person.
Three points deducted because it's my policy to never give someone a perfect score on anything. No one is perfect. Sorry if this offends you.
I believe that is the best way to write. Spill it out and fix it later. You never know when you'll get a great idea and later come back and say 'Wow, that was great!' Even if you don't use the same idea in the same story, it's great to have.
This was a great read. The first person is very well done. I'd like to see you continue it :)
That is my real name, and that is really me in the picture. Like Patrick says, I'm not in the witness protection program.
I mostly write books and stories. I like fantasy, or fiction, but if.. more..