Aces of the Never War

It's been a while since I've read a good war story. Honestly, Writerscafe has too many rosy poems and 'happy people' (term I use lightly) for my taste. ~_~ O well.

A good read. I'm guessing it's the story of a Japanese Zero pilot in WWII; at least, that's what I see in my head. Other than the grammer this is a good story.

Posted 14 Years Ago

Let me start by saying that you have a good story line here and I'm looking forward to reading part two. Now, on to the review...

Check your grammer, especially with the usage of the words "to" and "too" Also, sometimes you can say more by saying less. This can all be easily polished.

You have a very captivating story and I am looking forward to reading more. I am definitly wondering what the company is, who the enemy is and is our hero is a person, a creation... you got the hook. Keep up the good work!

Posted 14 Years Ago

I'm not really one for action/war stories, but I have to say, I liked this. The title was aswesome and drew me in immediatly. There were some grammatical errors you might want to fix - missing letters and such. Also, you might want to add something about who's telling the story right now. You didn't gave a name or anything and I couldn't even tell whether this was a guy or girl. But other than that this was pretty good!

Posted 14 Years Ago

I like this. it is very interesting opener. Great description, but there are some grammatical errors. Great job!

Posted 14 Years Ago