Sober

I wish there was a twelve step programme
To take to recover from you
I would freely admit my addiction:
The need
The release
The agony

I'm trying my best to dry out
A sobriety of the soul
But abstinence makes my heart grow fonder
And I am a drunk
A user
A lush

Purging myself of you
Takes more than vomit and pills
I wish it were simple but I'm climbing the walls;
I ache
And shiver
And sweat

So I've locked you away and thrown out the key
Because this is how it ends.
I would rather be sober
And empty
And numb
Than the drunk driver at the wheel

Author's Note

This is a new style of writing for me so I'd really appreciate a viewpoint on whether it works.

Reviews

[Valentine]

I am not into styles I never studied writing, I just like the thoughts behind this write. Nice one. Valentine

[PhoenixDown]

"I would rather be sober
And empty
And numb
Than the drunk driver at the wheel"

Indeed.

Love the topic here. It is a hard trigger to pull, but it would be delusional to disagree with you.
I think this style works. I don't think it works for everyone, but your line breaks are logical and only add to the build & flow. This isn't a choppy write. Well done. Keep this style in your repertoire. You hone it well.

Phoenix

[Sikandar Khan]

This One.Is Nice I Enjoyed WhileReading Nice Work Madam...

[aLittlePain]

Elegant, kick a*s poetry....lol am I allowed to say that? I knew you wouldn't mind :)
It really is though. Profound thoughts and polarising. I like that feeling when words really sink in...the message important! Visceral, honest writing! Masterfully done. R xo

[Dolce Vita]

Wow, thank you...you're right, I don't mind at all! I'm very new to poetry so it honestly means such a lot that you like it :) Xxx

[AKhaus]

withdrawal is slow but you can feel and see more when your sober...i like this poem a lot since i have been drunk most my life but feel it was drinking just to drink

[Dolce Vita]

I feel for you...being out of control is terrifying. I hope you can conquer your demons and find the peace you need.

[Gee]

Like this a lot. I've been trying my hand at writing recently, but not to sure, as I usually post simple rhyming verse. You obviously have an in built talent, so onwards and upwards my dear, head for the sky

[Adam Adams]

very well, my dear. guess, i'mma have to opt this new "SOW" -- the -- "Style Of Writing" for sure as it seems quite fascinating to heart. and being an erotic writer, i guess, i'mm enjoy this new style for sure.

the poetry's written very calmly... and of course, with much depth of "love-life". to me, love's something that can only be felt, perhaps, sometimes, it's something more than just a feel which further make everyone's feet loose-n up into the cockpit-canal of ecstasy, and here ecstasy is something more which belongs to pleasure but "with" some nocturnal vibes of heart as well. a very fair & fine poetry you come to lick down.

a true picture of true romance but despised and disguised love i get to watch throu' the saliva of your words.

kinda like these lines:

I've locked you away and thrown out the key
Because this is how it ends.
I would rather be sober
And empty
And numb
Than the drunk driver at the wheel

ouch! i kinda like your THIS nasty soberness for sure. a very new style. new format and a "new-age" type-pattern of literature you've shown here in this poetry. i'm sure would be "Expecting" some of the more pieces off yous being so written and "cummed down" in the same style. quite fascinating it is to read.

[Dolce Vita]

Your review is a work of art in itself! You've taken so much time to think about my work; genuinely, thank you. I've just posted another piece and I would definitely value your opinion.

[Johnson Bobby]

this beautiful a display of true courage a demon
released taking back one's identity knowing the
moon only comes out at night and the sun all ways returns

[Dolce Vita]

They are such kind words, thank you. I feel like the sun is coming out for me finally :)

[Iflybyyou]

Keep writing, you never know what will come from it, after all, you do have talent. But seriously though, what is it with all these girls comparing guys to drugs? Are we that addictive? Or is testosterone made of pure heroin?

[Dolce Vita]

Ha, no for me it was the experience not the person themselves that I found addictive. But I like your interpretation anyway ;)

[Iflybyyou]

Lol thanks xD I suppose you can be addicted to an experience. Why do you think people go bungee jumping?

[Justin]

the style of the poem was really great!!!! it was set up really awesome, it tells an amazing story too :) great job

[Dolce Vita]

Thanks so much, that means a lot :)