Before we meet

This rain has me in a terrible mood

Rain flowing around my feet

Falling apart, piece by piece

Standing out here all alone

Just me and the flowing road

Try to hold myself together

Unfazed, unmarked, oblivious to the weather

Hoping the rain washes away the bad

I'm sick of being broken, sick of being sad

I'm breaking, crumbling, in the rain

But it's so cold I can't feel the pain

Beats harder on my back, pounds my frame

Tears mix with precipitation, screaming your name

Fall to my knees, in the middle of the street

And headlights appear before we meet

Reviews

[Perri]

I really loved this...it's chilling and dark and sad, and conveys a lot of emotion and story for a short piece.
The penultimate and last lines had a really good lyricism to them...one of those sentences you just want to repeat because it sounds so good! The start isn't as strong but is still good, and it really gets into a good rythm by the end =)

[Annabelle Lee]

thank you

[Frieda P]

Sounds like life slamming into you, love the rain washing away the bad, sometimes it can be cleansing to the soul. You just keep growing with every read Annabelle from the first time I read you, kudos.

[Annabelle Lee]

Thank you

[Shadey Jadey]

Woah! There is so much emotion in this piece, dark and sad, love it! One could clearly see the images you conveyed so well. Love this piece Annabelle :) Xx

[Annabelle Lee]

Thank you!~

[quinfinn]

rain can do that...does me, if circumstances are right. this is very good, Annabelle, i see a slight change in your style but it is a good change...i think you are growing into a new idiom here. things can only get better. excellent write!

[Annabelle Lee]

thanks, quin!

[icelandicblue]

Annabelle,

In the 6 months that I have been here your writing has matured by leaps and bounds. If you are writing like this now I cannot imagine the poetry you will create in the future. You are truly a gifted writer.

[Annabelle Lee]

THank you!!!!!!