While I Was Sleeping

Something I just.... actually... I have no idea. enjoy

Brush your fingers along my surface
Leave an electric trail across my skin
Flood me with feelings and desires
Without having to go in
Kiss me softly, gently
Whisper oh so sweetly
Serenade me on the public stage
While romancing me discreetly
Lay with me, so innocent
Stay with me till the dawn
Hold me oh so gently
Before our youth is gone
Giggle, nibble, cuddle
I pray that you won't leave me
But I awake to soon found out
You snuck away while I was sleeping

Reviews

[quinfinn]

damn! i had to come by after you fixed it....just playing. very nicely constructed piece, full of youth and verve and blissful innocence. well done!

[Annabelle Lee]

thank you!

[LA Lorena]

Never mind changing the akin to skin to satisfy frieda's OCD tendencies. Mine tell me to fix it too, but as you are only 14, I'd rather think of someone trailing across your akin than your skin! ;)

[Annabelle Lee]

haha this is purely from my brain. no experience here!

[LA Lorena]

good! :)

[Annabelle Lee]

Im sure my parents would agree with you.

[skipperdeuce]

ahem, they do!

[Annabelle Lee]

Ha. Ha.

[Salar Majak]

LOL i love the ending! so unexpected!! great element of surprise you have there Anna! really great!! although this is such a sad reality it made me laugh, great write!

[Annabelle Lee]

haha thanks

[Frieda P]

It's very sweet but a little awkward. Quirky and lovable, like you.

'without having to go in'

Your mother would be proud. :-)

correct 'skin' please my ocd is on overdrive ;-)

[Annabelle Lee]

thanks! will do!

[Frieda P]

;-D

[Ahmad Cox]

Aww. Very sweet but sad at the end.

[Annabelle Lee]

thank you

[Baby Ricochet]

Really cute poem Annabelle. Nice work

[Annabelle Lee]

thank you

[Be myself!]

reminds me of a one night stand. Its hard but you will make it through in the end. My friends always tell me that after a break up. Great piece

[Annabelle Lee]

thank you!

[Be myself!]

Your welcome!