Off to Neverland

                                                       We fly off towards the clock

                                                      

                                                     And are suddenly reminded of the ticking Croc

                                                          

                                                          Away, away towards the second star to the right

                                                 

                                            We pass through the vortex of colors so bright

                                             

                                                    Cannons crash and roar through the air

                                                             

                                                             As the wind whips through our hair

                                                    We hear the silver Hook slice through the mast

 

                                     With much elegance and class, he shouts out just as fast

                                                  "Come down boy and face me like a man."

                                        

                                                           I wake up with a slice on my hand

 

                                                            "Was it all a dream?" I ask out loud

                                                   I guess we'll never know, just go about the crowd

Author's Note

I tried my best lol

Reviews

[Decere Tiozon]

I love Peter Pan! I was going to write a fan-fiction of him . . . but I don't write fan-fictions.

The beat and flow are tremendously flawless. However, you kind of faltered on the last line.

With such little space and words, you described things in a deeper level. Man, if you wrote a story it would be heaven.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you so much :) I'm so glad you like it

[Bowers]

very interesting, how often do we search to find another place... this totally left me intrigued.. great write..!

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

:) thank you, this was actually written about a dream I had about Neverland :)

[Bowers]

haha, really! That is ... so cool :D

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is delightful.. I think every male has a bit of Peter Pan in him and most young girls want to be Wendy. I love your rendition of the story.. great imagery and rhyme

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you so much :) I am so glad you like it

[Honey-Bee]

I love it! The feel of taking off to never land is fantastic...to wake up and not even knowing if you were dreaming is great.. Wonderful!

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you so much for the review :) Honestly this poem took me about 15 minutes to write, I'm so glad to see that everyone is enjoying it :)

[Tatiana Casali]

Seriously only 15 mintues? Impressive.

[Brittany Zedalis]

I am the biggest Peter Pan fan out there. I love Peter Pan. So the name of this immediately got my attention. This was very creative and enjoyable to read. :]

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you very very much ^*^ I love peter pan also, my great great grandmother met J.M Barrie once, so it is very much loved by me. I loved Hook, that movie was AMAZING!

[Brittany Zedalis]

I've seen that movie so many times haha I'm watching a show called Once Upon A Time and it's all about fairy tale characters, and in the 3rd season Peter Pan shows up, and you can only imagine my excitement when that happened. xD

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

I love once upon a time, but I haven't made it that far yet lol I'm still on season 2 :) I think Dustin Hoffman and Jason Isaacs have to be my 2 favorite Captain Hook's. I got to play him last year in the high-school peter pan play, OMG I looked so awesome lol

[Brittany Zedalis]

There's another Peter Pan show called Neverland that I watched on Netflix last year. The man who plays Hook in that one is probably one of my favorites.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Bob Hoskins plays smee in that one too I think, he played on Hook as well. I'm like over obsessed with Peter Pan and Alice in Wonderland lol >3< Question, would you like to join my broadcast on a website called grooveshark, I'm playing film scores :) If you dont want to thats fine

[Brittany Zedalis]

That's an online radio thing right?

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Yup :) My broadcast title is Amazing movie themes :)

[Zahra]

A beautiful piece, enjoyed reading

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you :) I'm glad you enjoyed it

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

I loved it, Peter Pan is my favourite fantasy movie. Such an awesome write.

Kaze~ :-)

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you so much ^-^ I love all the Peter Pan movies, especially Hook, OMG that was great. lol Im a major nerd X)

[&#9812; CrownedDevil &#9790;]

hahahaha I've seen all the Peter Pan movies except Hooked though. I'll have to watch it. :-)

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Hook has robin williams as peter pan, its amazing :)

[&#9812; CrownedDevil &#9790;]

OMG! :-) :-D

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Dustin hoffman is captain hook, if you know who that is. Best captain hook I have ever seen.

[&#9812; CrownedDevil &#9790;]

WOW! :-D I really want to watch it now. lol :-)

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

lol I know a website you can watch it on, want me to send you the link :)

[&#9812; CrownedDevil &#9790;]

Yes please. :-)

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Just sent it into your messages ^*^

[&#9812; CrownedDevil &#9790;]

Thank you. ^_^

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

No problem :) I now declare you (Fancy trumpet music lol XD) MY NEW BEST-FRIEND ^*^ lol Im so geeky

[&#9812; CrownedDevil &#9790;]

HAHAHAHAHA! it's ok. :-)